Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and adding a linking phrase to make it more natural and coherent. Try to avoid starting with 'Yeah' and instead use a more formal or neutral opening.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it serves as an excellent outlet for expressing my emotions and helps me relieve stress effectively.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases that affect clarity. To improve, focus on correct verb tenses, sentence structure, and clearer expression. Also, try to be concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Actually, when I was a teenager, I wanted to learn professional singing, but it was uncommon at that time, so I was unable to pursue it successfully.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains filler words and some awkward phrasing. To improve, reduce fillers like 'uh' and 'umm', use more natural expressions, and organize your answer with linking words for coherence.

例: Usually, I sing at home whether I am alone or with my family. Additionally, my friends sometimes ask me to sing for them, which I find very enjoyable.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. To improve, use correct sentence structures, avoid repetition, and clarify your ideas with linking words.

例: Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness. For example, listening to cheerful songs can improve your mood and help you feel happier when you are sad.

× Actually, when I was a teenager, I really want to learning professional how to sing, but unfortunately in those days it was not really common.

✓ Actually, when I was a teenager, I really wanted to learn professionally how to sing, but unfortunately in those days it was not really common.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'want' in present tense instead of past tense 'wanted' to match the past time frame 'when I was a teenager'. Also, 'learning' should be the base form 'learn' after 'want to'. 'Professional' should be the adverb 'professionally' to modify the verb 'learn'. The modal verb 'want to' requires the base form of the verb following it.

× The girl can sing a song and because of this, no, I couldn't successful be successful in this way.

✓ Girls can sing songs and because of this, no, I couldn't be successful in this way.

The sentence incorrectly uses singular 'The girl' when referring generally; plural 'Girls' is appropriate. Also, 'a song' should be plural 'songs' to match the general statement. 'Successful' is an adjective and should not be used as an adverb; 'be successful' is correct. The phrase 'couldn't successful be successful' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'couldn't be successful'.

× Sometimes my friends recommend me to sing a song for them and it will be really pleasure for me to sing song for them.

✓ Sometimes my friends recommend that I sing a song for them and it will be a real pleasure for me to sing a song for them.

The verb 'recommend' is followed by a clause with 'that' and the base verb, not 'recommend me to'. Also, 'really pleasure' is incorrect; it should be 'a real pleasure'. The article 'a' is needed before 'song' in 'sing a song'.

× Sometimes when you listen to a music, a happy music or a happy song, actually you can be happy or that song can't change your mood.

✓ Sometimes when you listen to music, happy music or a happy song, actually you can be happy or that song can change your mood.

The word 'music' is uncountable and does not take the article 'a'. Also, the sentence contradicts itself by saying 'you can be happy or that song can't change your mood'; it should be consistent. The corrected sentence clarifies that the song can change your mood positively.