Singing— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you like singing? Why?
受験者
Singing is one of my many talents. If I had to say, I enjoy singing because it brings me a sense of peace within me. And whenever I do sing or listen to music, I feel maybe relieved and I feel a big sense of relaxation depending on the songs that I listen to. But whenever I sing, I really feel that I'm talented. That's why I love singing.
試験官
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
受験者
I think it's genetics because my mother knows how to sing very well and she never learned how to do it. The same goes to my grandfather. So I'd definitely say that it was a talent rather than me learning how to sing.
試験官
Who do you want to sing for?
受験者
I want to sing in front of people who really feels the music, who really feels art, who really understand someone through art. That's why I definitely like to sing in front of someone that is a very and highly empathetic and highly sensitive to music.
試験官
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
受験者
I strongly believe that singing can make people happy due to them feeling understood through the lyrics, let's say, or through the melody of the music. Therefore they feel a big umm at say, frequency of joy filling them.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you like singing? Why?
スコア: 75.0提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific examples to support your feelings about singing.
例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and feel peaceful. For example, when I sing my favorite songs, I feel relieved and happy, which boosts my mood.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
スコア: 70.0提案: Provide a clearer and more direct answer to the question. Use linking words to explain your opinion and add specific details about your experience with singing lessons or self-learning.
例: I haven't taken formal singing lessons because I believe my ability comes from genetics. For instance, both my mother and grandfather are good singers without formal training.
Who do you want to sing for?
スコア: 65.0提案: Try to simplify your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific examples of the audience you prefer.
例: I want to sing for people who truly appreciate music and art because they can understand the emotions I express through my songs.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
スコア: 60.0提案: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Make your answer more natural by using simple and clear language. Provide specific reasons and examples to explain how singing brings happiness.
例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because the lyrics and melody help people feel understood and joyful, which improves their mood.
文法
× I want to sing in front of people who really feels the music, who really feels art, who really understand someone through art.
✓ I want to sing in front of people who really feel the music, who really feel art, who really understand someone through art.
The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be in the base form without 's'. Using 'feels' is incorrect because it is third person singular form, but here the subject is plural, so it should be 'feel'.
× That's why I definitely like to sing in front of someone that is a very and highly empathetic and highly sensitive to music.
✓ That's why I definitely like to sing in front of someone who is very and highly empathetic and highly sensitive to music.
The relative pronoun 'that' is incorrectly used for people; 'who' should be used instead. Also, the phrase 'a very and highly empathetic' is awkward; 'very' and 'highly' are both adverbs modifying 'empathetic', and 'a' is singular article. The correction keeps the original structure but changes 'that' to 'who' to correctly refer to a person.
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