Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "I've never relaxing." Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural. For example, you could say: "I don't usually sing, but I enjoyed being in the choir during high school. We practised for over two hours every morning, which was tiring but rewarding."

例: I don't usually sing, but I enjoyed being in the choir during high school. We practised for over two hours every morning, which was tiring but rewarding.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific details. Also, try to avoid repeating the same information from the previous answer. For example, you could say: "Yes, I learnt singing as a hobby in high school. We practised different songs for over two hours daily, which helped me improve my vocal skills."

例: Yes, I learnt singing as a hobby in high school. We practised different songs for over two hours daily, which helped me improve my vocal skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and off-topic. The question asks who you want to sing for, so try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence. Avoid irrelevant details. For example: "I don't have a specific person in mind, but I would love to sing for my family and friends to make them happy."

例: I don't have a specific person in mind, but I would love to sing for my family and friends to make them happy.

提案: Your answer is good but contains a typo "seeing" instead of "singing." Also, you can improve coherence by using linking words and more specific vocabulary. For example: "Yes, I believe singing can lift people's spirits. For instance, during a difficult breakup eight years ago, I found comfort by listening to and singing along with my favourite artists' songs."

例: Yes, I believe singing can lift people's spirits. For instance, during a difficult breakup eight years ago, I found comfort by listening to and singing along with my favourite artists' songs.

× To be honest, I've never relaxing.

✓ To be honest, I've never relaxed.

The verb 'relaxing' is incorrectly used here. After 'I've never', the past participle form 'relaxed' should be used to indicate an action that has never happened. Using the '-ing' form is incorrect in this context.

× I can recall back in high school when I joined the choir and it was a very interesting experience.

✓ I can recall back in high school when I joined the choir and it was a very interesting experience.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense; no correction needed.

× We would practice for over 2 hours every day early in the morning, which was quite tiresome.

✓ We would practice for over 2 hours every day early in the morning, which was quite tiresome.

This sentence is correct; 'practice' is used properly here as a base verb after 'would'.

× My earliest memories of when I tried out singing as a hobby was back in high school where we would practice over 2 hours every day singing various songs.

✓ My earliest memories of when I tried out singing as a hobby were back in high school where we would practice over 2 hours every day singing various songs.

The subject 'memories' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was' to agree in past tense and number.

× I can't say that I have a particular individual in mind that I would love to sing for, but I can recall when you went to this concert last year, October, this artist sang for us about 3 songs in his album Backed by.

✓ I can't say that I have a particular individual in mind that I would love to sing for, but I can recall when I went to this concert last year, in October; this artist sang about 3 songs from his album Backed by.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used; it should be 'I' to refer to the speaker's own experience. Also, 'in October' is the correct prepositional phrase, and 'sang about 3 songs from his album' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I believe that seeing can help improve an individual's mood.

✓ Yes, I believe that singing can help improve an individual's mood.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'singing' to match the context of the conversation.

× For example, when I was going through a breakup about 8 years ago, I would listen to my favorite artists and sing his songs.

✓ For example, when I was going through a breakup about 8 years ago, I would listen to my favorite artists and sing their songs.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect when referring to 'favorite artists' (plural). The correct pronoun is 'their' to agree in number.