Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lặp từ không cần thiết. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh bị ngắt quãng giữa chừng.

例: Yes, I really love singing because it helps me relax and temporarily forget the pressure from my studies. I often sing alone, but I also enjoy singing with my friends sometimes.

提案: Bạn nên hoàn thành câu trả lời một cách đầy đủ và tránh để câu bị dang dở. Sử dụng các liên từ để nối các ý và làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp từ.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing before, but I would like to learn in the future because I enjoy music and believe singing can help me express myself better.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên luyện tập phát âm và chọn từ phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh dùng từ không đúng hoặc không rõ nghĩa.

例: If I had to choose someone to sing for, I would definitely choose Taylor Swift because she is a talented singer and a great songwriter who inspires many people around the world. It would be an amazing experience to perform for her.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Hãy tránh lặp từ và đảm bảo câu hoàn chỉnh.

例: I think singing can bring happiness to people because music helps us relax and temporarily forget about our stress, such as the pressure from studies.

× Yes I truly I really love singing because it's help me relax and temporarily forget all my pressure from my study.

✓ Yes, I truly, I really love singing because it helps me relax and temporarily forget all my pressure from my study.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to the use of the third person singular form.

× When I am alone I am sing a lot but when I am with my friends and.

✓ When I am alone, I sing a lot, but when I am with my friends, I don't sing as much.

The original sentence is incomplete and has incorrect verb form 'am sing'. The correct structure is 'I sing' for present tense. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and needs completion for clarity.

× Uh, if I have to choose some beep someone to think for, I would definitely make Tailors, which is not only a talented people but always though a great songwriter who inspires many around the world.

✓ Uh, if I have to choose someone to sing for, I would definitely choose Taylor, who is not only a talented person but also a great songwriter who inspires many around the world.

The sentence contains incorrect pronouns and word choices: 'some beep someone to think for' is unclear and incorrect; 'make Tailors' should be 'choose Taylor'; 'people' should be 'person'; 'always though' is incorrect and should be 'also'. These errors affect clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think it would be amazing experience to perform for her.

✓ I think it would be an amazing experience to perform for her.

The sentence is missing the article 'an' before 'amazing experience'. This is an article error that affects the sentence's grammatical correctness.

× As for me, I think singing can be happiness to people because, for example, music can make me people, make people relax and not temporarily forget all my pressure from my study.

✓ As for me, I think singing can bring happiness to people because, for example, music can make people relax and temporarily forget all the pressure from their studies.

The original sentence has incorrect pronoun usage: 'make me people' is incorrect; it should be 'make people'. Also, 'not temporarily forget' is incorrect; it should be 'temporarily forget'. Additionally, 'all my pressure from my study' should be generalized to 'all the pressure from their studies' to match the subject 'people'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.