Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I definitely like singing because it is my hobby. I used to perform on stage during school and college cultural events. Singing helps me express myself and connect with others.

提案: Your answer is informative but contains grammatical mistakes and is a bit long. Use proper tenses and sentence structure. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I have learned singing from my teachers during school and college. Even now, I continue to learn new techniques from different teachers and also gain knowledge about musical instruments.

提案: Your answer does not directly address the question. The examiner asked 'Who' you want to sing for, but you talked about your love for culture and music. Try to answer the question directly with a topic sentence and then add supporting details using linking words.

例: I want to sing for my family and community because I love sharing my culture through music. Singing for them motivates me to perform well on stage.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical errors and filler words like 'uh' and 'Matlab'. Avoid fillers and improve sentence structure. Also, use linking words to clarify your points and keep the answer concise.

例: I don't think singing always brings happiness because some songs express sadness and other emotions. Therefore, singing can evoke different feelings depending on the song's mood.

× Singing is my hobby and I always singing and perform on the stage in school time and college time because I'm always participating cultural events.

✓ Singing is my hobby and I am always singing and performing on the stage during school and college time because I always participate in cultural events.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I always singing' instead of the correct continuous form 'I am always singing'. Also, 'perform' should be in the '-ing' form 'performing' to match the continuous action. Additionally, 'participating cultural events' lacks the preposition 'in'. The correct phrase is 'participate in cultural events'. These corrections ensure proper verb forms and preposition usage.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing with my teachers in school time and college time and still I am learning so many things about singing with the different teachers and about gain knowledge from music instruments.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing with my teachers during school and college time and I am still learning many things about singing with different teachers and gaining knowledge from musical instruments.

The phrase 'about gain knowledge' is incorrect; it should be 'gaining knowledge' to use the gerund form after 'about'. Also, 'music instruments' should be 'musical instruments' as the correct adjective form. 'In school time and college time' is better expressed as 'during school and college time' for naturalness.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

The question uses 'Who' as the object of the verb 'want to sing for'. The correct object pronoun is 'Whom'. However, in spoken English, 'Who' is often used informally, but grammatically 'Whom' is correct here.

× Yes, definitely. I love my culture and my music and the various type of songs which helps me to perform well on stage.

✓ Yes, definitely. I love my culture, my music, and the various types of songs which help me perform well on stage.

The phrase 'various type of songs' should be pluralized to 'various types of songs' to agree in number. Also, 'which helps' should be 'which help' to agree with the plural subject 'types of songs'. The phrase 'helps me to perform' is better as 'help me perform' for conciseness.

× No, I don't think so because uh, syncing is not always bring happiness to people's.

✓ No, I don't think so because, uh, singing does not always bring happiness to people.

The verb 'bring' needs the auxiliary 'does' to form the negative present tense: 'does not always bring'. Also, 'syncing' is a misspelling of 'singing'. 'People's' is possessive and incorrect here; the plural noun 'people' is correct.

× Some songs are very sad and they express the emotions of sadness.

✓ Some songs are very sad and express emotions of sadness.

The phrase 'they express the emotions of sadness' is wordy and redundant. Removing 'they' and 'the' makes the sentence more concise and natural: 'and express emotions of sadness'.

× That's why, uh, Matlab, there are two different things.

✓ That's why, uh, I mean, there are two different things.

'Matlab' is a Hindi/Urdu word meaning 'meaning' or 'that is'. In English, it should be replaced with 'I mean' or 'that is' to maintain clarity and correctness in spoken English.

× Singing can't always bring happiness.

✓ Singing can't always bring happiness.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.