Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中时态使用不准确，且表达略显冗长。建议使用现在时态描述习惯性行为，简化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress when I feel nervous. It also allows me to express my emotions, whether I am happy or upset.

提案: 时态使用不当，建议使用一般过去时描述过去经历。句子结构可以更简洁，避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in high school. My singing skills were poor then, so I took some online lessons which helped me improve a lot.

提案: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议简化句子，注意主谓一致和代词使用，逻辑更连贯。

例: I want to sing for my friends because they encouraged me when I lacked confidence. Their support motivated me to keep practicing and never give up.

提案: 句子缺少谓语动词，表达不完整且用词不当。建议使用完整句子，选择更贴切的词汇，表达更准确。

例: Yes, singing is a simple way to entertain others and it can also give people a strong sense of renewal, which leads to happiness.

× Yes, I like singing because singing can help me relieve the stress when I was nervous, plus it can also help me to experience my emotion about the happiness or upset.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing can help me relieve stress when I am nervous, plus it can also help me to experience my emotions about happiness or being upset.

这里的时间是现在时态，描述的是一般情况，所以不能用过去时"was nervous"，应改为现在时"am nervous"。另外，"the stress"和"my emotion about the happiness or upset"表达不准确，应该去掉定冠词并用复数形式"stress"和"emotions"，"upset"应改为"being upset"以表达情绪状态。

× Yes, I had learned that when I was a high school student.

✓ Yes, I learned that when I was a high school student.

这里描述过去发生的动作，使用过去完成时"had learned"不合适，应使用一般过去时"learned"。过去完成时通常用于两个过去动作中较早发生的那个，而这里没有这样的语境。

× so I learned some online lectures about singing and it helped me a lot.

✓ so I learned from some online lectures about singing and it helped me a lot.

"learned some online lectures"表达不准确，应该是"learned from some online lectures"，表示从网络课程中学习。

× my friends always encouraged me to insist to practice the singing and he tell me never give up it.

✓ my friends always encouraged me to keep practicing singing and they told me never to give up.

这里主语是复数"friends"，但后面用单数代词"he"不正确，应改为复数"they"。另外，"insist to practice"搭配错误，应改为"keep practicing"，"never give up it"中"give up"后不需要宾语"it"。

× So I want to sing it because he's encouraged and our friendship.

✓ So I want to sing because he has encouraged me and because of our friendship.

"sing it"中"it"指代不明且不需要，应该去掉。"he's encouraged"缺少宾语，应为"he has encouraged me"。另外，"and our friendship"连接不完整，需补充"because of"使句子完整。

× Yes, singing a simple way to entertain other but also it can give people strong sense of renaissance which lead to their happiness.

✓ Yes, singing is a simple way to entertain others, and it can also give people a strong sense of renewal which leads to their happiness.

句子缺少系动词"is"，导致结构不完整。"entertain other"应为"entertain others"，复数形式。"strong sense of renaissance"用词不当，应为"strong sense of renewal"。"which lead"主谓不一致，应为"which leads"。