Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且更准确地表达情感。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and feel happy. For example, when I am sad, singing allows me to express my emotions and reduce stress.

提案: 回答缺乏连贯性，句子不完整，建议使用完整句子并使用连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I have learned some singing skills during my music lessons at school. The teachers taught us basic techniques like breathing exercises and pitch control.

提案: 回答中断断续续，语法错误较多，建议使用完整句子并明确表达感情。

例: I want to sing for my family because they enjoy singing too. Singing for them is a way to show my gratitude and appreciation.

提案: 回答表达混乱，逻辑不清，建议理清思路，使用连贯的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. Even singing sad songs can comfort others, while happy songs can make people feel joyful.

× Why I like singing?

✓ Why do I like singing?

该句缺少助动词“do”来构成疑问句，正确的疑问句结构应为“Why do I like singing?”。在英语中，疑问句通常需要助动词。

× Because singing can make me feel relaxed and elated.

✓ Because singing can make me feel relaxed and elated.

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× For example, when I'm sad, singing cannot be expressed.

✓ For example, when I'm sad, I cannot express my singing.

原句结构混乱，表达不清。应明确主语和谓语，表达“我无法表达我的歌唱”。

× My emotions and reduce stress.

✓ It helps me express my emotions and reduce stress.

原句缺少主语和谓语，导致句子不完整。应补充主语和谓语使句子完整。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

“learnt”和“learned”均为“learn”的过去分词，英式英语用“learnt”，美式英语用“learned”，根据语境选择一致即可。

× Partly, I only learn.

✓ Partly, I have only learned a little.

原句时态和表达不完整，应使用现在完成时表达过去到现在的学习经历。

× Singing my music lesson in school, the teachers.

✓ In my music lessons at school, the teachers

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语和连贯性，应调整词序和补充必要成分。

× Will teach us.

✓ will teach us

该句为片段，应与前句合并，形成完整句子。

× Some simple.

✓ some simple

该片段不完整，应与后文合并。

× Singing knowledge such as breathing, exercise.

✓ singing knowledge such as breathing exercises,

表达不完整，缺少谓语和连贯性，应补充完整。

× And pitch exercise.

✓ and pitch exercises.

应使用复数形式“exercises”，并与前文连贯。

× I want to sing for my family because.

✓ I want to sing for my family because

句末不应有句号，且应与后文连贯。

× They also like singing.

✓ they also like singing.

该句语法正确，无需修改。

× And I want to sing.

✓ and I want to sing

句末不应有句号，且应与后文连贯。

× To them, to express my grateful.

✓ to them to express my gratitude.

“grateful”是形容词，名词形式应为“gratitude”。

× And thankful.

✓ and thankfulness.

“thankful”是形容词，名词形式应为“thankfulness”。

× Sometimes because when we're singing.

✓ Sometimes, because when we're singing,

句子不完整，应补充逗号并与后文连贯。

× Sad songs which can brings happiness to others.

✓ sad songs which can bring happiness to others.

“can”后应接动词原形，“brings”应改为“bring”。

× But when? We are singing.

✓ But when we are singing,

句子不完整，问号不合适，应改为逗号并与后文连贯。

× Song, they are very happy, which can.

✓ songs, they are very happy, which can bring happiness.

句子结构混乱，缺少谓语和连贯性，应补充完整表达。