Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences complete and clear. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel pleasant and relaxed. For instance, I often sing while bathing, which is quite comforting."

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel pleasant and relaxed. For instance, I often sing while bathing, which is quite comforting.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Make sure to finish your sentences and provide specific details. Use linking words to organize your answer logically. For example: "I haven't received professional singing lessons, but I learned some basics in music class during junior high school."

例: I haven't received professional singing lessons, but I learned some basics in music class during junior high school.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using better vocabulary and linking words. Also, avoid negative expressions like "awful"; instead, you can say "not very good." For example: "I don't have a specific person in mind to sing for because I'm not very good at singing. However, if I had to choose, I would sing for my parents."

例: I don't have a specific person in mind to sing for because I'm not very good at singing. However, if I had to choose, I would sing for my parents.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words properly. For example: "Yes, definitely. Singing stimulates people neurologically and is an important way to communicate emotions. Therefore, it can bring happiness to people."

例: Yes, definitely. Singing stimulates people neurologically and is an important way to communicate emotions. Therefore, it can bring happiness to people.

× Uh, I like singing because it makes me. Pleasant and relaxed, I often think while I was bathing and it's quite comfort.

✓ Uh, I like singing because it makes me feel pleasant and relaxed. I often think about it while I am bathing, and it's quite comforting.

The original sentence has sentence fragments and incorrect word forms. 'It makes me. Pleasant and relaxed' is a fragment; it should be 'it makes me feel pleasant and relaxed.' Also, 'comfort' should be the adjective form 'comforting' to describe the feeling. Additionally, 'while I was bathing' should be 'while I am bathing' to match the present tense context. The sentence structure needs to be corrected to form complete and coherent sentences.

× Well, the answer is kind of both. I'm I wasn't educated professionally in singing, but in my educational journey, I would. For example, when I was in junior high school, there was a music class and.

✓ Well, the answer is kind of both. I wasn't educated professionally in singing, but during my educational journey, I did learn some. For example, when I was in junior high school, there was a music class.

The original sentence contains incomplete sentences and awkward phrasing. 'I'm I wasn't educated' is incorrect; it should be 'I wasn't educated.' The phrase 'in my educational journey, I would' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'during my educational journey, I did learn some.' The last sentence ends abruptly and should be completed properly. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, I don't have anyone in particular who I want to sing for because my ability of singing is awful.

✓ Well, I don't have anyone in particular for whom I want to sing because my singing ability is awful.

The phrase 'who I want to sing for' is informal and can be improved by using the preposition before the relative pronoun: 'for whom I want to sing.' Also, 'ability of singing' is awkward; the correct phrase is 'singing ability.' These changes improve formality and grammatical accuracy.

× But if I sing for someone, I want to sing for my parents.

✓ But if I sing for someone, I want to sing for my parents.

This sentence is grammatically correct and does not require correction.

× Yeah, definitely, I suppose. And the reason is that singing is itself stimulates people neurologically and it is also a very important way to communicate with each other. And.

✓ Yeah, definitely, I suppose. The reason is that singing itself stimulates people neurologically, and it is also a very important way to communicate with each other.

The original sentence has redundant words and an incomplete ending. 'Singing is itself stimulates' is incorrect; it should be 'singing itself stimulates.' The sentence ends abruptly with 'And.' which should be removed. These corrections improve sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.