Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复表达，如“re reduce”和“can make me feel happy and can help me forget some trouble things”，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，同时注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions and reduce stress. Moreover, singing with friends makes me happy and helps me forget my troubles.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，如“I'm not have enough confidence”和“try have a lessons”，且表达不够流畅。建议练习正确的时态和句型，避免口语填充词。

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I don't have enough confidence in my singing ability. Therefore, I haven't tried to take lessons in Sydney.

提案: 回答不完整且语法混乱，句子结构不清晰。建议先明确主题句，再用具体细节支持，避免重复和语法错误。

例: I want to sing for my family because they always support me. Even though I'm not confident in my singing, singing for them makes me happy.

提案: 回答中有重复表达“think singing”，且最后一句不完整。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并完整表达观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people reduce stress and express emotions. Additionally, singing with friends enhances this joyful experience.

× Yes, I really like singing because singing can help me express my emotions and re reduce my stress.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because singing can help me express my emotions and reduce my stress.

这里的're reduce'是多余的，正确用法是'reduce'，表示减少压力。

× singing with friends can make me feel happy and can help me forget some trouble things.

✓ singing with friends can make me feel happy and can help me forget some troublesome things.

'trouble things'用法不正确，应该用形容词'troublesome'修饰名词，表示令人烦恼的事情。

× No, actually I have never taken formal singing lessons because I'm not have enough confidence in singing ability.

✓ No, actually I have never taken formal singing lessons because I don't have enough confidence in my singing ability.

'I'm not have'结构错误，应该用'I don't have'表示否定。

× So I don't uh, I don't want to try have a lessons in Sydney.

✓ So I don't, uh, want to try to have lessons in Sydney.

'a lessons'数量词和名词不匹配，'lessons'是复数，前面不加'a'，且动词搭配应为'try to have'。

× Well, I want to sing for my family because they always supposed to be, although I have although I'm not confident in my singing ability.

✓ Well, I want to sing for my family because they are always supportive, although I'm not confident in my singing ability.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语，'they always supposed to be'不完整，改为'they are always supportive'更通顺。

× I still feel happy when I sing important.

✓ I still feel happy when I sing, which is important to me.

原句缺少必要成分，'sing important'不合语法，需补充完整表达。

× Scientifically, I really think singing will bring happiness to people because I think singing is a great way to help people reduce their stress and express their emotions.

✓ Scientifically, I really think singing brings happiness to people because it is a great way to help reduce stress and express emotions.

句子冗长重复，调整使表达更简洁流畅。

× What's more, singing with friends.

✓ What's more, singing with friends is enjoyable and beneficial.

原句不完整，缺少谓语，需补充完整句子。