Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达情感和原因。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and connect with my friends. I enjoy singing various types of music, including English and Chinese songs.

提案: 回答中有明显的语法错误和词汇使用错误，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的词汇和句型，直接回答问题并补充简短说明。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing formally. I just sing casually with my friends for fun.

提案: 回答结构混乱，表达不连贯，缺少清晰的主题句和逻辑连接词。建议先明确回答对象，再用连词补充原因，表达更清晰。

例: I want to sing for my friends and family because some people find it hard to express their emotions. Singing is a good way to show my feelings and appreciation.

提案: 回答中有犹豫和重复，表达不够流畅。建议使用更自信和连贯的句子，明确说明原因并使用连接词。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it is a form of exercise that releases chemicals in the brain, helping people feel relaxed and joyful.

× Yes, I like singing because it's I think it's a good way to be, to be, to relate, stress and socialize with friends.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I think it's a good way to relieve stress and socialize with friends.

原句中“to be, to be, to relate, stress”结构混乱，正确表达应为“relieve stress”，即“缓解压力”。这里需要使用动词的-ing形式作为动名词，表示喜欢的活动。

× And I like saying all kinds of music, including English and Chinese.

✓ And I like singing all kinds of music, including English and Chinese.

原句中“saying”用错，应为“singing”，因为表达的是“唱各种音乐”，动词应为“sing”。

× No actually I haven't ever learned how to say no.

✓ No, actually I haven't ever learned how to sing.

原句中“learned how to say no”与上下文不符，正确应为“learned how to sing”，表示“学过唱歌”。

× I'm just a a muter and I just sing with my friends casually for fun and never receive formal training.

✓ I'm just a muter and I just sing with my friends casually for fun and have never received formal training.

原句中“never receive”时态不正确，应使用现在完成时“have never received”，表示从未接受过正式训练。

× A lot of people, but like my friends and my families, I want to, you know, some know Chinese, they're always so they don't want to express their emotions.

✓ A lot of people, but like my friends and my family, I want to, you know, some who know Chinese, they're always like that so they don't want to express their emotions.

“families”应为单数“family”，表示“我的家人”；“some know Chinese”应为“some who know Chinese”，需要加关系代词。

× So I think it's a good way to express your ideas and thankfulness and appreciation by singing songs.

✓ So I think it's a good way to express your ideas, thankfulness, and appreciation by singing songs.

列举多个名词时应使用逗号分隔，且“thankfulness and appreciation”之间应加逗号以符合英语习惯。

× Yes, I think actually singing is. Maybe it's a kind of exercising as well and maybe it can help you to release some chemicals to help you feel happy and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I think actually singing is. Maybe it's a kind of exercise as well and maybe it can help you release some chemicals to help you feel happy and relaxed.

“a kind of exercising”应为“a kind of exercise”，因为“exercise”是名词；“help you to release”中“to”可省略，更自然。