Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误（seeing应为singing），且表达不够自然流畅。建议注意单词拼写，避免重复表达，并尝试用更自然的句式表达自己的感受。

例: Actually, I don't like singing because my friend often says I'm not good at it. This makes me feel embarrassed, so I usually avoid singing in front of others.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇（main main），且逻辑表达不清晰。建议避免重复，明确表达因果关系，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I took some singing lessons when I was in primary school, but I haven't had any since then. I think this is why I can't sing very well now.

提案: 回答中存在重复词汇（English English），且部分歌曲名称表达不准确。建议注意词汇准确性和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I want to sing for my daughter because she is very cute and lovely. I often sing English children's songs to her, such as "Twinkle Twinkle Little Star" and "One Little Finger."

提案: 回答表达较好，但部分句子略显冗长。建议适当简化句子结构，使用更多连接词使表达更自然。

例: I completely agree. For example, when I sing to my daughter, she feels very happy, and I believe it creates a pleasant atmosphere at home. Moreover, it helps strengthen our bond.

× Actually I don't like seeing because my friend always tells me that I'm not good at it.

✓ Actually I don't like singing because my friend always tells me that I'm not good at it.

这里的动词应该用动名词形式，表示喜欢或不喜欢做某事。'seeing' 应改为 'singing'，因为题目是关于唱歌。动名词用法是表示动作的名词形式。

× so I usually avoid seeing in public.

✓ so I usually avoid singing in public.

动词 'avoid' 后面应接动名词形式，表示避免做某事。'seeing' 应改为 'singing'，符合上下文语境。

× I had some lessons before when I was in primary school, but later I didn't have any kind of singing lessons.

✓ I had some lessons before when I was in primary school, but later I didn't have any singing lessons.

'any kind of' 在这里多余且不自然，直接用 'any singing lessons' 更简洁准确。

× I think this is the main main reason that I can sing well.

✓ I think this is the main reason why I cannot sing well.

句子中重复了 'main'，且语义与上下文不符，应该表达“我唱得不好”的原因，故改为否定句。

× I always sing some English English child song for her.

✓ I always sing some English children's songs for her.

'English English child song' 结构重复且不正确，应改为 'English children's songs'，表示英语儿童歌曲。

× For example Twinkle Twinkle Little star or other songs like 1 little finger 1 little finger I will always want to sing to her.

✓ For example, 'Twinkle Twinkle Little Star' or other songs like 'One Little Finger'. I will always want to sing to her.

歌曲名称应首字母大写且正确拼写，'star' 应大写，'1 little finger' 应为 'One Little Finger'，且句子应分开，避免冗长。

× I can feel she's very happy and I am very confident that I make a very pleasant atmosphere in my home.

✓ I can feel that she is very happy, and I am very confident that I create a very pleasant atmosphere in my home.

'feel' 后应接从句，需加 'that'，且 'make' 用于创造氛围不太合适，改为 'create' 更准确。

× For example Twinkle Twinkle Little star or other songs like 1 little finger 1 little finger I will always want to sing to her.

✓ For example, 'Twinkle Twinkle Little Star' or other songs like 'One Little Finger'. I will always want to sing to her.

歌曲名称中 'Little Star' 中的 'Star' 应大写，且歌曲名称前不需要冠词 'the'，保持专有名词格式。