Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use the correct tense and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I particularly enjoy singing in my personal space because it allows me to express my emotions and helps me feel more relaxed." Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: I particularly enjoy singing in my personal space because it allows me to express my emotions and helps me feel more relaxed.

提案: Use correct prepositions and plural forms, and avoid repeating similar ideas. For example, say "No, I haven't had the opportunity to attend singing classes because I'm not confident singing in front of other people and I feel stressed doing so."

例: No, I haven't had the opportunity to attend singing classes because I'm not confident singing in front of other people and I feel stressed doing so.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. For example, say "To be honest, I don't want to sing for anyone because I'm not confident in myself. I usually feel anxious and stressed performing in public, so I avoid doing it."

例: To be honest, I don't want to sing for anyone because I'm not confident in myself. I usually feel anxious and stressed performing in public, so I avoid doing it.

提案: Complete your sentences and use linking words for coherence. For example, say "Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music is a universal language that everyone can understand, regardless of their background or language. Also, listening to music can help people relax and feel joyful."

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music is a universal language that everyone can understand, regardless of their background or language. Also, listening to music can help people relax and feel joyful.

× I'm particularly enjoying singing in my personal space because it's an outlet for me to express my emotion, which could make me feel more relaxed.

✓ I particularly enjoy singing in my personal space because it's an outlet for me to express my emotions, which makes me feel more relaxed.

The verb 'enjoy' is a stative verb and is usually used in the simple present tense rather than the present continuous. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context. 'Could make' is better as 'makes' to express a general truth.

× No, I haven't had the opportunity to attend singing class.

✓ No, I haven't had the opportunity to attend singing classes.

The noun 'class' should be plural 'classes' because it refers to general singing lessons, which are countable and usually plural in this context.

× The main reason is because I'm not confident of singing in front of other peoples and I also feel stressful doing that.

✓ The main reason is that I'm not confident singing in front of other people and I also feel stressed doing that.

The phrase 'confident of' should be 'confident' followed directly by the verb. 'Peoples' is incorrect; the correct plural is 'people'. 'Feel stressful' is incorrect; it should be 'feel stressed' to describe a feeling.

× To be honest, I don't want to sing for anyone. The main reason is because I'm not confident on myself.

✓ To be honest, I don't want to sing for anyone. The main reason is that I'm not confident in myself.

The correct preposition after 'confident' is 'in', not 'on'. Also, 'is because' is better replaced with 'is that' for formal correctness.

× Also I usually feel anxious and also stressful to perform in front of public so I usually prevent from doing it.

✓ Also, I usually feel anxious and stressed when performing in front of the public, so I usually avoid doing it.

'Stressful' describes something causing stress, but here the feeling is 'stressed'. 'In front of public' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Prevent from doing it' is incorrect; 'avoid doing it' is the correct phrase.

× Yes, I think singing is a way to transmit happiness to people because music is a universal language which people can understand even they speak different language or from different background.

✓ Yes, I think singing is a way to transmit happiness to people because music is a universal language that people can understand even if they speak different languages or come from different backgrounds.

The sentence needs 'that' to introduce the relative clause. 'Even they speak' should be 'even if they speak'. 'Language' and 'background' should be plural to match 'different'.

× Also by listening to music can release.

✓ Also, listening to music can help release stress.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a subject. Adding 'listening to music' as the subject and completing the verb phrase makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.