Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak biraz dağınık ve tekrarlayıcı. Daha kısa ve net cümleler kullanarak, neden sevmediğinizi açıkça belirtmelisiniz. Ayrıca, gereksiz tekrarları azaltmalısınız.

例: No, I don't like singing because I am not confident about my voice. When people ask me to sing, I feel nervous and uncomfortable.

提案: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. Daha düzgün ve akıcı cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, neden bırakmak zorunda kaldığınızı daha açık ifade edin.

例: I tried to learn singing during the pandemic, but I wasn't very good and I didn't enjoy it, so I stopped taking classes.

提案: Cümleniz anlamlı ancak bazı tekrarlar ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha akıcı ve doğal cümleler kurmaya özen gösterin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri daha tutarlı yapabilirsiniz.

例: If I were more confident, I would like to sing for my mother because I want to see her enjoy my singing. This was my goal during the pandemic.

提案: Cümleniz tekrarlayıcı ve biraz dağınık. Daha spesifik ve net ifadeler kullanarak düşüncelerinizi daha etkili aktarabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and feel joyful.

× I'm not able to sing like a Rihanna and the other singers.

✓ I'm not able to sing like Rihanna and the other singers.

The definite article 'a' is incorrectly used before a proper noun 'Rihanna'. Proper nouns do not require an article unless specified. Remove 'a' before 'Rihanna'.

× when people told me to sing, I got flustered immediately.

✓ when people tell me to sing, I get flustered immediately.

The sentence refers to a habitual or general situation, so present tense should be used instead of past tense to indicate repeated or current occurrences.

× I was trying to learn how to sing during on pandemics but I wasn't a very good student so I dropped off my singing classes because my voice was awful and I can't stand my voice so I dropped singing.

✓ I was trying to learn how to sing during the pandemic but I wasn't a very good student so I dropped my singing classes because my voice was awful and I couldn't stand my voice so I stopped singing.

The preposition 'during on' is incorrect; 'during' should be followed by a noun without 'on'. Also, 'pandemics' should be singular 'pandemic' as it refers to a specific event. 'Dropped off' is incorrect in this context; 'dropped' is appropriate. 'Can't' should be past tense 'couldn't' to match past context. 'Dropped singing' is incorrect; 'stopped singing' is the correct expression.

× If I would be more confident about my voice, I would like to sing to my mother.

✓ If I were more confident about my voice, I would like to sing to my mother.

In conditional sentences expressing hypothetical situations, 'If I were' is the correct form, not 'If I would be'.

× I would want to see her like enjoying while I'm singing.

✓ I would want to see her enjoying while I'm singing.

The preposition 'like' is incorrectly used here. The verb 'enjoying' should directly follow without 'like' to express the intended meaning.