Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but a bit long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'as well as', you can use 'and' or 'which'.

例: Yes, I love singing because it makes me happy and allows me to express my creativity. Although I'm not a professional singer, I enjoy spending time singing as it is a beautiful form of art.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Also, try to avoid vague phrases like 'maybe someday'. Instead, express your intentions more confidently.

例: I haven't taken any professional singing classes, but a friend who is a professional singer gave me some vocal training. I really enjoyed it and hope to attend formal classes in the future.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct prepositions and verb forms. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'if I ever made a chance'.

例: I would like to sing for my parents because they have always encouraged me to pursue singing. Although I haven't taken professional classes or considered a singing career, I would definitely sing for them if I get the opportunity.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but the language is a bit awkward and some words are misused. Try to use simpler and more accurate vocabulary. Also, organize your answer logically with linking words.

例: I believe singing is a form of art that can bring happiness to people. For example, duets can create joy and help express emotions, which connects people and makes them feel happy together.

× I'm not professional singer but I really enjoy singing.

✓ I'm not a professional singer but I really enjoy singing.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'professional singer'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' corrects the singular noun usage.

× one of my friends was a professional singer and he used to give me some training about the vocal cord.

✓ one of my friends was a professional singer and he used to give me some training about the vocal cords.

The phrase 'vocal cord' should be plural 'vocal cords' because humans have two vocal cords. This is a singular/plural issue related to anatomical terms.

× they were really interested for me to do something in this field of singing

✓ they were really interested in me doing something in this field of singing

The correct preposition after 'interested' is 'in', not 'for'. Also, 'me doing' is more natural than 'me to do' in this context.

× I was not mostly interested on taking the professional classes or going for the career into singing.

✓ I was not mostly interested in taking professional classes or pursuing a career in singing.

The correct preposition after 'interested' is 'in', not 'on'. Also, 'going for the career into singing' is awkward; 'pursuing a career in singing' is the correct phrase.

× So I think if I ever made a chance then I would obviously get.

✓ So I think if I ever get a chance, then I would obviously take it.

The original sentence has incorrect conditional structure and missing object. 'Made a chance' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'get a chance'. Also, 'would obviously get' is incomplete; it should be 'would obviously take it' or similar.

× Duets can make someone delighted, they can feel the exuberant because of the singing

✓ Duets can make someone delighted; they can feel exuberance because of the singing

'Delighted' is an adjective and should be used with 'make someone feel delighted' or 'make someone delighted' is acceptable but 'feel the exuberant' is incorrect. 'Exuberant' is an adjective; the noun form 'exuberance' should be used here.

× So it is a good form of art which makes people like minded as well as they are very happy about it.

✓ So it is a good form of art which makes people like-minded and very happy about it.

The phrase 'like minded as well as they are very happy about it' is awkward. Using 'and' to connect 'like-minded' and 'very happy' is clearer and grammatically correct. Also, 'like-minded' should be hyphenated.