Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, and avoid redundancy. For example, directly state that singing helps you relieve stress during exams, and avoid awkward phrases like "ask one of the ways."

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax, especially during stressful times like exams. Singing is a great way for me to relieve stress and feel happier.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, and avoid mixing tenses. Also, say "learned to sing" instead of "learned singing."

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons. I learned to sing by listening to my favourite music. Since I also study piano, I have some basic knowledge of pronunciation and music theory, which helps me.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to express your ideas more naturally and avoid repeating the same phrase. Also, clarify what you mean by "a high time to celebrate myself."

例: I usually sing for myself because it feels like a way to celebrate my achievements and boost my confidence. Singing helps me appreciate my successes.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid awkward phrasing like "taking example of." Also, be more specific about how singing brings happiness.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For example, K-pop idols perform great songs for their fans, and I have noticed that the fans feel joyful and entertained when they sing along.

× I would like to use singing to ask one of the ways that to relieve my stress.

✓ I would like to use singing as one of the ways to relieve my stress.

The phrase 'use singing to ask one of the ways that to relieve my stress' is incorrect because 'ask' is not the appropriate verb here. The correct structure is 'use singing as one of the ways to relieve my stress.' This uses 'as' to indicate the function of singing and removes the unnecessary 'ask' and 'that to' which are grammatically incorrect in this context.

× No, I did not.

✓ No, I have not.

The question 'Have you ever learnt how to sing?' uses the present perfect tense, so the answer should also be in present perfect tense to match. 'No, I did not' is simple past and does not fit the question's tense. The correct response is 'No, I have not.'

× I learned singing simply by listening my favorite music because I'm also a student learning about piano, so I will have some basic knowledge about the pronunciation and also the theory.

✓ I learned singing simply by listening to my favorite music because I'm also a student learning piano, so I have some basic knowledge about pronunciation and also theory.

The verb 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' before the object, so it should be 'listening to my favorite music.' Also, 'learning about piano' is better expressed as 'learning piano.' The phrase 'I will have some basic knowledge' is incorrect because the knowledge is current, so 'I have some basic knowledge' is correct. Additionally, 'the pronunciation' and 'the theory' should be without 'the' as they refer to general concepts.

× Well, I would like to sing for myself because I think singing is a high time to celebrate myself, to have some good successful achievement.

✓ Well, I would like to sing for myself because I think singing is a good time to celebrate myself and to have some successful achievements.

The phrase 'a high time' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'a good time.' Also, 'some good successful achievement' is awkward; it should be 'some successful achievements' to be plural and natural. The conjunction 'and' is better than a comma to connect the two ideas.

× taking example of K pop idols, they always sing some great songs to the fans and from my observation I found those fans are really happy and also enjoyable when they are singing.

✓ Taking the example of K-pop idols, they always sing great songs for the fans, and from my observation, I find those fans are really happy and also enjoy themselves when they are singing.

The phrase 'taking example of' should be 'taking the example of.' 'Sing some great songs to the fans' is better as 'sing great songs for the fans.' The verb 'found' should be present tense 'find' to match 'from my observation.' Also, 'fans are really happy and also enjoyable' is incorrect; 'enjoyable' describes something that causes enjoyment, so it should be 'enjoy themselves.'