Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, bạn nên dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc hiện tại đơn phù hợp và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "it's give" nên là "it gives". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, tránh dài dòng và lặp lại ý.

例: Yes, I really love singing because it lifts my mood and makes me feel more energetic after a long day of studying, especially when I'm feeling sad or angry.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời hiện tại có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc không mạch lạc, ví dụ "since I was basically class. Three" không đúng. Hãy sử dụng cấu trúc đúng và thêm liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn.

例: Yes, I have been learning how to sing since I was in third grade, and I know how to use some basic notes.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi như "safe feelings" nên là "a sense of safety" hoặc "comfort". Ngoài ra, câu cuối cùng không rõ nghĩa, cần sửa lại để truyền đạt ý đúng.

例: I would like to sing for my family and friends, especially my best friend, because they make me feel comfortable and appreciate my singing.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "feel more better" là lỗi thừa từ, nên chỉ dùng "feel better". Ngoài ra, bạn có thể dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music plays an important role in our lives. For example, when you feel sad or angry, listening to relaxing music can help you unwind and feel better.

× Yes, I really fell in love with singing because it's give me good mood and more energetic after a long day of studying, especially when I feel sad or angry.

✓ Yes, I really fell in love with singing because it gives me a good mood and makes me more energetic after a long day of studying, especially when I feel sad or angry.

The verb 'give' should be in the third person singular present tense 'gives' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'more energetic' needs a verb like 'makes' to be grammatically correct. The phrase 'good mood' requires the article 'a' before it.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing since I was basically class. Three, and I knew how to use some basic notes.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing since I was basically in class three, and I knew how to use some basic notes.

The phrase 'since I was basically class. Three' is incorrect. It should be 'since I was basically in class three' to indicate the time reference properly. The preposition 'in' is necessary here.

× I would like to sing for my families, my friends, especially my best friend because they give me a safe feelings and not they're not just what I'm singing.

✓ I would like to sing for my family, my friends, especially my best friend because they give me a safe feeling and they are not just listening to what I'm singing.

The word 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family. 'Safe feelings' should be 'a safe feeling' to be grammatically correct. The phrase 'not they're not just what I'm singing' is unclear and corrected to 'they are not just listening to what I'm singing' for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music plays an important role in our life. For example, when you feel sad or angry, you should find some, you know relaxed music to let your hair down and feel more better.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music plays an important role in our life. For example, when you feel sad or angry, you should find some, you know, relaxing music to let your hair down and feel better.

The adjective 'relaxed' should be 'relaxing' to describe music that causes relaxation. The phrase 'feel more better' is incorrect; 'better' alone is sufficient as it is a comparative form.