Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且内容相关，但存在语法错误和重复表达，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，并注意冠词使用。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. Additionally, it allows me to connect with others who share the same hobby.

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议使用简单句表达，注意时态一致，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I learned to sing when I was a child. I took part in the school choir and practiced every weekend, where I learned some basic singing skills.

提案: 回答表达了情感，但存在语法错误和重复，建议简化表达，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意单复数和冠词的正确使用。

例: I want to sing a special song for my family because they have always supported me. Also, it is a family tradition to sing together during gatherings.

提案: 回答中有多处语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用准确词汇，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, singing can help people relieve stress and express their emotions. Moreover, it creates a joyful atmosphere that makes people feel happier and more relaxed.

× Sometimes it also can offer a opportunity for people to communicate with people who have who share the same hobbies.

✓ Sometimes it also can offer an opportunity for people to communicate with people who share the same hobbies.

这里的“a opportunity”中，'opportunity'是以元音音素开头的单词，前面的冠词应该用'an'而不是'a'。此外，'who have who share'中多余的'who have'应删除。

× Yes, I have learned how to sing when I was a child I take part in the school choir we usually have practicing at every weekend and I began to have some I began to learn some skills from the.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child. I took part in the school choir. We usually practiced every weekend, and I began to learn some skills.

句子中时态混乱，'have learned'应改为过去式'learned'，'take part'应改为过去式'took part'，'have practicing'应改为过去式'practiced'。此外，句子结构不完整，需要分句。

× It's because there are there's people, there's someone who always supported me.

✓ It's because there are people, someone who always supported me.

'there are there's people'中'are'和'there's'重复，应去掉'there's'。

× And it's also a traditional for my family to sing a song in front of families when gathering.

✓ And it's also a tradition for my family to sing a song in front of family members when gathering.

'a traditional'应为'noun'形式'tradition'，'families'应改为'family members'以符合语境。

× Yes, of course, seeing can make can help people to relieve stresses and expel emotions.

✓ Yes, of course, singing can help people to relieve stress and expel emotions.

'seeing'应为'singing'，'stresses'应为不可数名词'stress'。

× It also can create an enormous that can make people feel much hair much happier.

✓ It also can create an enormous effect that can make people feel much happier.

句子缺少名词，'an enormous'后应加名词'effect'，'hair'是多余的，应删除。