Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时句子结构较为混乱，缺少适当的连接词，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用连接词如“because”、“and”来使表达更连贯，同时注意语法正确。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress and relax. Also, singing is a useful skill, especially when I have fun with friends at karaoke; I can sing confidently without feeling embarrassed.

提案: 回答中表达不够清晰，句子结构重复且有语法错误。建议使用更简洁明确的句子，并避免重复表达。

例: Not really. I usually listen to many songs and practice singing by myself. Since it's just for fun, I don't think it's necessary to pay for singing classes.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子较长且部分表达不够自然。建议分句表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅自然。

例: I would like to sing for my parents. Singing makes them happy and proud of me. It is also a way to express my gratitude and happiness. If I perform well, it will bring them a lot of joy.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并用连接词使内容连贯。

例: Yes, absolutely. For example, at music festivals and ceremonies, singing creates a joyful atmosphere. It helps people feel connected and experience positive emotions, so I believe singing definitely brings happiness.

× sing is also a practical skills that if I will have some fun with friends in the KTVI can sing

✓ singing is also a practical skill that if I have some fun with friends in the KTV, I can sing

skills是复数形式，但前面用的是单数sing，应该用singing表示动名词，且skill应为单数形式。句子中also a practical skills应改为also a practical skill。

× sing is also a practical skills that if I will have some fun with friends in the KTVI can sing

✓ singing is also a practical skill that if I have some fun with friends in the KTV, I can sing

friends是复数，前面用some修饰复数名词正确，无需改动。

× sing is also a practical skills that if I will have some fun with friends in the KTVI can sing

✓ singing is also a practical skill that if I have some fun with friends in the KTV, I can sing

动名词singing用来表示喜欢的动作，更符合语境。

× if I will have some fun with friends in the KTVI can sing

✓ if I have some fun with friends in the KTV, I can sing

条件句中一般现在时表示将来，不能用will，应该用if I have。

× sing is also a practical skills that if I will have some fun with friends in the KTVI can sing

✓ singing is also a practical skill that if I have some fun with friends in the KTV, I can sing

skills应为skill，单数形式。

× I just listen a lot of songs and practice by myself.

✓ I just listen to a lot of songs and practice by myself.

动词listen后应加介词to，表示听某物。

× I just listen a lot of songs and practice by myself.

✓ I just listen to a lot of songs and practice by myself.

listen后面需要加介词to，表示听某物。

× I don't think if it's just fun I don't think it should pay money to have some class about it.

✓ I don't think if it's just for fun, I should pay money to have some classes about it.

should后面缺少主语I，且classes应为复数，表示多节课。

× I don't think if it's just fun I don't think it should pay money to have some class about it.

✓ I don't think if it's just for fun, I should pay money to have some classes about it.

class应为复数classes，表示多节课。

× I don't think if it's just fun I don't think it should pay money to have some class about it.

✓ I don't think if it's just for fun, I should pay money to have some classes about it.

about it用法不当，通常说have classes for something或about something，但此处可省略about it。

× Singing can make them feel happy and proud of me, and it's a way for me to express my gratitude and happiness so that if I can perform well, it will bring them a lot of joy.

✓ Singing can make them feel happy and proud of me, and it's a way for me to express my gratitude and happiness, so if I can perform well, it will bring them a lot of joy.

so that用法不当，改为so更合适。

× Singing can bring a joyful atmosphere to people and they also can feel connected with others and have positive emotions through seeing, so I think it must bring some happiness.

✓ Singing can bring a joyful atmosphere to people, and they can also feel connected with others and have positive emotions through seeing, so I think it must bring some happiness.

and they also can改为and they can also更符合英语习惯。

× Singing can bring a joyful atmosphere to people and they also can feel connected with others and have positive emotions through seeing, so I think it must bring some happiness.

✓ Singing can bring a joyful atmosphere to people, and they can also feel connected with others and have positive emotions through seeing, so I think it must bring some happiness.

connected with others用法正确，无需改动。

× Singing can bring a joyful atmosphere to people and they also can feel connected with others and have positive emotions through seeing, so I think it must bring some happiness.

✓ Singing can bring a joyful atmosphere to people, and they can also feel connected with others and have positive emotions through seeing, so I think it must bring some happiness.

through seeing表达不清，建议改为through listening或through music更合适，但根据题意保留原句。