Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant and expresses your feelings well, but it contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. Try to use correct verb forms and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax in my spare time and makes me feel more comfortable. Moreover, it allows me to express my emotions positively, rather than through arguments or conflicts. In this way, singing is like a safe haven for me.

提案: Your answer is quite long and contains some unclear and awkward phrases, which affect clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas more clearly, use appropriate linking words, and avoid filler words or vague expressions. Also, check your grammar and sentence structure for accuracy.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing, but I think it would be interesting to try in the future. I am a big fan of singers and enjoy listening to songs, which often make me feel calm and peaceful. Therefore, I would definitely like to learn singing one day.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but includes some repetition and unclear phrases that reduce clarity. Try to express your ideas more precisely and avoid filler words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and check for grammatical accuracy.

例: I would probably sing for my mum because we have never shared experiences like singing together or going to karaoke just the two of us. My dad is not really interested in songs, so singing for my mum would be more meaningful.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and sentence structure for accuracy.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it provides a sense of relaxation and release. It helps people feel at ease and delighted, which contributes to their overall happiness.

× Yeah, I do like singing because singing often unwinding me in my spare time, which allows me to feel more comfortable and released.

✓ Yeah, I do like singing because singing often unwinds me in my spare time, which allows me to feel more comfortable and relaxed.

The verb 'unwinding' is incorrectly used here; the correct form is the third person singular present tense 'unwinds' to agree with the singular subject 'singing'. Also, 'released' should be 'relaxed' to correctly express the feeling of comfort.

× Ohh not really I'm I've never learned how to sing but I guess down the line it would be an interesting thing to try to be honest, since I'm a big fan of singers and singing and you know, song in general and the genre really gives me a polite feeling and every single time when I hear so I would be definitely down to try it.

✓ Ohh not really, I've never learned how to sing but I guess down the line it would be an interesting thing to try, to be honest, since I'm a big fan of singers and singing and, you know, songs in general and the genre really gives me a positive feeling every single time I hear them, so I would definitely be down to try it.

The sentence had several issues: 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match the context; 'polite feeling' is incorrect and should be 'positive feeling'; 'every single time when I hear so' is awkward and corrected to 'every single time I hear them'; also, punctuation and sentence structure were improved for clarity.

× Probably I would sing for my mom. It's mainly because I never had that sort of mom and son experience like, you know, singing together, going to karaoke by on ourselves selves.

✓ Probably I would sing for my mom. It's mainly because I have never had that sort of mom and son experience like, you know, singing together, going to karaoke by ourselves.

The phrase 'by on ourselves selves' is incorrect and redundant. The correct phrase is 'by ourselves' to indicate doing something alone or just the two of us.

× So yeah, definitely my mom, my my dad isn't a big fan of songs and stuff. So it's you know.

✓ So yeah, definitely my mom. My dad isn't a big fan of songs and stuff, so you know.

The sentence was run-on and had repeated words 'my my'. It was corrected by splitting into two sentences and removing repetition for clarity.

× So basically I think singing and songs gives happiness to people and make them feel delighted.

✓ So basically I think singing and songs give happiness to people and make them feel delighted.

The subject 'singing and songs' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' instead of 'gives' to agree in number.