Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, avoiding filler words like 'you know'. Also, use correct grammar and complete sentences. For example, say 'I don't enjoy singing because I don't have a good voice, and I usually just imitate music without much success.'

例: I don't really enjoy singing because I don't have a good singing voice. Most of the time, I just try to imitate songs, but I don't think I do it well.

提案: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and has grammatical mistakes. Focus on the question about learning to sing, and answer directly. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct sentence structure. For example, 'I have not formally learned how to sing, but I used to play piano three years ago. At that time, I enjoyed singing for my family, although my teacher said my voice was not very good.'

例: I haven't taken singing lessons, but I learned piano about three years ago. During that time, I liked singing for my family, even though my teacher told me my voice wasn't very strong.

提案: Your answer is understandable but needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct response, then add details using linking words. For example, 'If I learn to sing in the future, I would like to sing for my mother because she is a hardworking woman whom I love very much.'

例: If I learn how to sing in the future, I want to sing for my mother because she works very hard and I love her a lot.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct opinion and support it with reasons or examples. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. For example, 'Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and express their emotions, similar to meditation.'

例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy because it allows them to relax and express their feelings, much like meditation does.

× I don't enjoy about singing because I don't have any good vocal and most of the time I use music for imitation for myself and I didn't anything.

✓ I don't enjoy singing because I don't have a good voice, and most of the time I use music to imitate myself, but I didn't do anything.

The phrase 'enjoy about singing' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is followed directly by the gerund without 'about'. 'Good vocal' should be 'good voice' as 'vocal' is an adjective. 'Use music for imitation for myself' is awkward; 'use music to imitate myself' is correct. 'I didn't anything' is incomplete; it should be 'I didn't do anything'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I didn't anything.

✓ I didn't do anything.

The verb 'did' requires a base form verb after it. 'Didn't anything' is incomplete; the correct form is 'didn't do anything' to express the negative past action properly.

× You know, I used to learn piano I think 3 years ago and, and at that time I loved to sing for myself and my family.

✓ You know, I used to learn piano about 3 years ago, and at that time I loved to sing for myself and my family.

The phrase 'I think 3 years ago' is awkward; 'about 3 years ago' is more natural. The rest of the sentence is correct in past tense usage.

× But my teacher said to me, you don't have any good voice, voice for speak for singing.

✓ But my teacher told me that I don't have a good voice for singing.

The phrase 'said to me' is better expressed as 'told me'. 'Any good voice' should be 'a good voice' because 'voice' is countable here. 'Voice for speak for singing' is incorrect; it should be 'a good voice for singing'. This correction clarifies the meaning and corrects preposition and article usage.

× Actually if I learn singing in future, I interested to sing for my mother because she's a hard working woman and I love it so I start to sing.

✓ Actually, if I learn singing in the future, I am interested in singing for my mother because she's a hardworking woman and I love her, so I will start to sing.

'In future' should be 'in the future' to specify time. 'I interested to sing' is incorrect; it should be 'I am interested in singing'. 'Hard working' should be 'hardworking' as one word. 'I love it' is unclear; 'I love her' refers to the mother. 'I start to sing' should be 'I will start to sing' to indicate future intention.

× Actually, I don't have any idea for this question, but I can say my perspective about science because I'm I'm a sign blister and you know, I see the sign as meditation.

✓ Actually, I don't have any idea about this question, but I can share my perspective about singing because I'm a sign blaster, and you know, I see singing as meditation.

'Idea for this question' should be 'idea about this question'. 'Perspective about science' seems to be a typo; it should be 'perspective about singing' to match context. 'Sign blister' is likely a mishearing or typo; 'sign blaster' is unclear but assumed to mean 'singer' or similar; corrected to 'sign blaster' as per original. 'I see the sign as meditation' should be 'I see singing as meditation'. These corrections improve clarity and preposition use.