Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear in places. Try to keep your response concise and clear, directly answering the question first, then adding specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "it's Terra beauty for me." Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like singing because it has been my hobby since childhood. I learned to sing by watching tutorials on YouTube and admiring some famous singers. Singing helps me relax and express my emotions effectively.

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit informal and includes a question back to the examiner, which is not necessary. Try to respond confidently and clearly, using linking words to structure your answer. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and keep your sentences concise.

例: I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I have learned by watching vocal coaches on YouTube. Additionally, I practice by singing my favourite and popular songs regularly.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and confusing phrases. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. Avoid ambiguous or incomplete sentences. Use simple and correct English to express your ideas.

例: I don't have children yet, but I would love to sing lullabies for my future kids. When I was a child, my parents used to sing lullabies to me, and I want to do the same because it creates a special bond.

提案: Your answer is good in content but has some grammatical mistakes and informal expressions like 'uh' and 'I sewed them'. Try to use correct grammar and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly and provide specific examples smoothly.

例: I definitely believe that singing brings happiness to people. Not only does it uplift moods, but it also unites people. For example, once while travelling, I saw a group of older men singing together; although they were strangers, they shared smiles and joy through singing.

× I have never learned how to sing officially but I did try learning through YouTube through some of the vocal trainers or coaches and I do also practice singing while uh singing the songs that I like or songs that are trending.

✓ I have never learnt how to sing officially but I did try learning through YouTube through some of the vocal trainers or coaches and I also practice singing the songs that I like or songs that are trending.

The verb 'learned' is the American English past tense and past participle form, while 'learnt' is the British English past participle form. Since the rest of the transcript uses British English spelling (e.g., 'learnt'), consistency requires using 'learnt'. Also, 'do also practice singing while uh singing' is redundant; 'also practice singing' is sufficient and clearer.

× I have never learned how to sing officially but I did try learning through YouTube through some of the vocal trainers or coaches and I do also practice singing while uh singing the songs that I like or songs that are trending.

✓ I have never learnt how to sing officially but I did try learning on YouTube from some of the vocal trainers or coaches and I also practice singing the songs that I like or songs that are trending.

The preposition 'through' is incorrectly used with 'YouTube' and 'vocal trainers'. The correct prepositions are 'on YouTube' and 'from some of the vocal trainers or coaches' to indicate the source of learning.

× I don't have my own children yet, but if unfortunately not, I've made it of my own.

✓ I don't have my own children yet, but if unfortunately not, I have made it on my own.

The phrase 'I've made it of my own' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I have made it on my own', meaning to achieve something independently. The pronoun usage and phrase structure needed correction.

× I really like singing lullaby program because it's something that I really long for as I was a child that I wasted.

✓ I really like singing lullabies because it's something I really longed for as a child that I missed out on.

The original sentence has structural issues and unclear meaning. 'Singing lullaby program' is incorrect; it should be 'singing lullabies'. The phrase 'as I was a child that I wasted' is unclear and ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'as a child that I missed out on' to convey the intended meaning.

× My parents sang for me about the sons that I would always want to try to come in. Please.

✓ My parents sang lullabies to me, and I have always wanted to try singing them.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronoun and phrase usage. 'Sang for me about the sons' is incorrect; it should be 'sang lullabies to me'. The phrase 'that I would always want to try to come in' is unclear and corrected to 'I have always wanted to try singing them' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× I definitely believe that singing can make happiness to people.

✓ I definitely believe that singing can bring happiness to people.

The verb 'make' is incorrectly used with 'happiness to people'. The correct verb is 'bring' when referring to causing happiness for people. Also, 'make happiness to people' is ungrammatical; 'bring happiness to people' is the correct expression.

× And one day one experiences that I have witnessed was while I was travelling in my toe, I saw a bunch of uh, older men singing together and they were all strangers, but they were all singing together and I sewed them with all smiles and.

✓ And one experience that I witnessed was while I was travelling in my town, I saw a bunch of older men singing together. They were all strangers, but they were singing together and I saw them all smiling.

The phrase 'travelling in my toe' is incorrect; it should be 'travelling in my town'. The verb 'sewed' is a misspelling of 'saw'. The sentence was also fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness.