Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 'one of the way' 대신 'one of the ways'를 사용하고, 'school words'는 'schoolwork'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I like singing because it is one of the ways I can reduce stress from schoolwork.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'because'가 반복되어 문장이 어색하며, 'more academics subjects'는 'more academic subjects'로 수정해야 합니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장 구성을 연습하세요.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing because I don't have enough time due to studying other academic subjects.

提案: 답변이 의미 전달이 불분명하고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 구체적인 대상을 명확히 해야 합니다. 예를 들어, 가족이나 친구를 위한 것임을 명확히 표현하세요.

例: I want to sing for my family because I enjoy sharing my singing with them.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 'You stress'는 의미가 불분명하며, 문장을 완성형으로 만들어야 합니다. 노래가 사람들에게 행복을 줄 수 있다는 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps reduce stress and people enjoy listening to music.

× Yes, I usually like singing because singing is one of the way can reduce my stress from school words.

✓ Yes, I usually like singing because singing is one of the ways that can reduce my stress from school work.

The word 'way' should be plural 'ways' because it refers to one among multiple methods. Also, 'school words' is incorrect; it should be 'school work' to mean tasks or assignments from school.

× No, because I don't have enough time to study singing because I have to study other more academics subjects.

✓ No, because I don't have enough time to study singing since I have to study other more academic subjects.

The phrase 'academics subjects' is incorrect; 'academic' is the correct adjective form modifying 'subjects'. Also, 'because' is repeated unnecessarily; replacing the second 'because' with 'since' improves sentence flow.

× I want to sing for my thing. I love this, my singing and this.

✓ I want to sing for my family. I love singing and this.

'My thing' is unclear and incorrect; likely the speaker meant 'my family' or a similar noun. Also, 'my singing and this' is vague; simplifying to 'I love singing' is clearer. Pronouns and references should be clear and specific.

× Yes, I think singing can bring. You stress and I like to listen music so if I sing and the listener can be happy.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness. You can relieve stress, and I like to listen to music, so if I sing, the listeners can be happy.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'You stress' is incorrect; it should be 'You can relieve stress'. 'Listen music' requires the preposition 'to'. Also, 'the listener' should be plural 'listeners' to generalize. Proper conjunctions and punctuation improve clarity.