Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good in expressing your feelings about singing, but some parts are unclear and grammatically incorrect, such as 'it's a fun way to contact and we also connect with the other during to the greatness.' Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, when I feel stressed, listening to my favorite songs instantly lifts my mood. Additionally, singing is a fun way to connect with others and share happiness.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear pronoun references, such as 'he also helps me' when referring to your mother. Use correct verb forms and clear pronouns. Also, try to provide more details about your learning experience to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, when I was young, my mother taught me how to sing. She helped me improve my singing skills and encouraged me to practice regularly. My mother has been my first and most important singing teacher.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'I have also a grand girlfriend' and 'their support' when referring to singular 'girlfriend'. Use correct articles and pronouns. Also, try to link your ideas smoothly.

例: I would like to sing for my family and close friends. I also have a wonderful girlfriend, and I want to sing for her because her support and encouragement motivate me to improve and enjoy singing even more.

提案: Your answer repeats the same idea and has unclear expressions like 'I can enjoy a little bit, some moment'. Try to be more specific and use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For me, singing allows me to express my emotions and feel joyful. After singing, I often feel relaxed and more positive, which shows how powerful singing can be.

× Additionally, it's a fun way to contact and we also connect with the other during to the greatness.

✓ Additionally, it's a fun way to connect and we also connect with each other during great moments.

The phrase 'contact and we also connect with the other during to the greatness' is incorrect. 'Contact' should be 'connect', 'the other' should be 'each other', and 'during to the greatness' is ungrammatical; it should be 'during great moments' or similar. The prepositions and word choices are incorrect here, so correcting them improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, when I was young my mother teach me how to singing and he also helps me to do better things in singing.

✓ Yes, when I was young my mother taught me how to sing and she also helped me to do better things in singing.

The verb 'teach' should be in past tense 'taught' to match 'when I was young'. 'How to singing' is incorrect; it should be 'how to sing' because 'to' is followed by the base form of the verb. Also, 'he' is incorrect pronoun here; it should be 'she' referring to 'my mother'. The verb 'helps' should be past tense 'helped' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Yes, when I was young my mother teach me how to singing and he also helps me to do better things in singing.

✓ Yes, when I was young my mother taught me how to sing and she also helped me to do better things in singing.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrect when referring to 'my mother'. The correct pronoun is 'she'. Using the correct pronoun is essential for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I have also a grand girlfriend, so I would like to sing for my girlfriend also because their support and encouragement motivate me to improve and enjoy the experience even more.

✓ I also have a great girlfriend, so I would like to sing for my girlfriend also because her support and encouragement motivate me to improve and enjoy the experience even more.

The phrase 'I have also a grand girlfriend' is awkward; 'I also have a great girlfriend' is more natural. 'Grand' is not commonly used to describe a person in this context. Also, 'their support' is incorrect when referring to a singular girlfriend; it should be 'her support' to match singular possessive pronoun.

× After singing, I can enjoy a little bit, some moment because it expresses my emotions.

✓ After singing, I can enjoy a little bit, some moments because it expresses my emotions.

The phrase 'some moment' is incorrect because 'moment' is singular and 'some' is used with plural nouns. It should be 'some moments' to be grammatically correct.