Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，例如“enjoyed to singing”应为“enjoy singing”，句子结构混乱，影响理解。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式，并避免冗余。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my feelings. When I stay at home, singing makes me feel more comfortable and happy.

提案: 回答中有重复和不连贯的表达，如“On the other hand, is my hobby”不合适。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，使用连贯的句子，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: I first learned to sing when I was in elementary school. Now, singing is my hobby, and I usually sing at home during my free time.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确，如“won't be afraid of my pronouns”应为“won't be afraid of making mistakes in pronunciation”。建议使用准确的词汇表达，并注意语法和句子结构。

例: I usually go to karaoke with my friends because it's fun. However, I also like singing alone since it makes me feel more comfortable and less worried about my pronunciation.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，如“I I”，“will will”，以及“seeing”应为“singing”。建议注意发音和拼写，避免重复，句子结构应更清晰。

例: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because they often sing when they feel emotional, whether they are sad or happy.

× Yes, I really enjoyed to singing because it's really helped me to relax and to put out my actions and make me feel more comfortable when I staying home and just don't cannot aware for every.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it really helps me to relax and to express my emotions and makes me feel more comfortable when I stay home and just cannot be aware of everything.

动词enjoy后面应直接接动名词形式（-ing），不能用to + 动词原形。句中“enjoyed to singing”应改为“enjoy singing”。另外，时态应与现在习惯相符，故将过去时改为现在时。

× Yes, I really enjoyed to singing because it's really helped me to relax and to put out my actions and make me feel more comfortable when I staying home and just don't cannot aware for every.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it really helps me to relax and to express my emotions and makes me feel more comfortable when I stay home and just cannot be aware of everything.

动词短语“put out my actions”表达不准确，应改为“express my emotions”（表达我的情感）。此外，“when I staying home”中“staying”应改为动词原形“stay”以符合时态和语法。

× Yes, I really enjoyed to singing because it's really helped me to relax and to put out my actions and make me feel more comfortable when I staying home and just don't cannot aware for every.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it really helps me to relax and to express my emotions and makes me feel more comfortable when I stay home and just cannot be aware of everything.

句中“just don't cannot aware for every”语法混乱，应改为“just cannot be aware of everything”，即“无法注意到所有事情”，以表达正确的意思。

× First of all, I learned how to sing when I was an elementary school student. Right now, I usually sing at home when I have the free time. On the other hand, is my hobby. Uh, it's my current hobby.

✓ First of all, I learned how to sing when I was an elementary school student. Right now, I usually sing at home when I have free time. On the other hand, it is my hobby. Uh, it's my current hobby.

句子“On the other hand, is my hobby.”缺少主语，应补充“it”。此外，“the free time”中的定冠词“the”不合适，应去掉。

× I usually hang out with my friends to karaoke and I think it's very fun. Moreover, I usually sing by myself because this made me feel more comfortable and also it won't be afraid of my pronouns.

✓ I usually hang out with my friends to go karaoke and I think it's very fun. Moreover, I usually sing by myself because this makes me feel more comfortable and also I won't be afraid of my pronunciation.

“to karaoke”应改为“to go karaoke”或“to sing karaoke”，表达更准确。句中“this made me feel”时态应与上下文一致，改为“makes me feel”。“it won't be afraid of my pronouns”表达错误，应为“I won't be afraid of my pronunciation”（我不会害怕我的发音）。

× I usually hang out with my friends to karaoke and I think it's very fun. Moreover, I usually sing by myself because this made me feel more comfortable and also it won't be afraid of my pronouns.

✓ I usually hang out with my friends to go karaoke and I think it's very fun. Moreover, I usually sing by myself because this makes me feel more comfortable and also I won't be afraid of my pronunciation.

“it won't be afraid of my pronouns”中“won't be afraid”用法不当，主语应为人称“I”，且“pronouns”应为“pronunciation”。

× Of course I I believe seeing can bring happiness to people because people usually will will singing when they feel emotional and even it is sadness or happiness.

✓ Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because people usually sing when they feel emotional, whether it is sadness or happiness.

“seeing”应为“singing”，动词拼写错误。句中“will will singing”重复且用法错误，应改为“usually sing”。此外，“even it is sadness or happiness”表达不自然，改为“whether it is sadness or happiness”更合适。