Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence clarity. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy by focusing on key points. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel calm when I am stressed. Since school, I have enjoyed performing on stage, which was a great experience. Additionally, I continued singing in high school, exploring different songs.

提案: Try to improve grammar and sentence structure, for example, use 'a favorite hobby' and 'I learned singing at school'. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

例: Yes, singing is one of my favorite hobbies. I learned singing at school because there were singing classes. Additionally, my friends taught me about vocal cords, and I also learned techniques from the Internet.

提案: Your answer is clear but try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words like 'especially' and 'moreover' to improve coherence. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and be more specific about the effects of singing.

例: I especially like to sing for myself because it helps me relax during stressful times. Moreover, I enjoy singing love songs for my girlfriend, which strengthens our relationship and creates a warm atmosphere.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'oh yes, probably' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' to make your answer more logical and fluent. Be more specific about how singing brings happiness.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people feel calm and relaxed. Furthermore, when someone sings nearby, it creates a pleasant atmosphere, which can uplift everyone's mood.

× I have some different song.

✓ I have some different songs.

The noun 'song' should be plural 'songs' because 'some' indicates more than one. In English, countable nouns require plural form when referring to multiple items.

× I have learned singing when I was in my school as there were singing classes in my school and also when I was in my high school.

✓ I learned singing when I was at my school as there were singing classes at my school and also when I was in my high school.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to being present at a school; 'at' is the correct preposition to indicate location. Using 'at' clarifies the place where the action happened.

× My friends taught me the vocal chords and I have also learned it from Internet and.

✓ My friends taught me the vocal cords and I have also learned it from the Internet.

The word 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before it. Also, 'vocal chords' is a misspelling; the correct term is 'vocal cords'. The sentence also ends abruptly with 'and', which should be removed for completeness.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun to use after a preposition like 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is often used informally.

× I love singing different love songs for her which makes a really good environment between us.

✓ I love singing different love songs to her which creates a really good atmosphere between us.

The verb 'sing' is usually followed by the preposition 'to' when indicating the person receiving the action. Also, 'environment' is better replaced by 'atmosphere' in this context to describe the feeling between people.

× Atmosphere is created whenever someone sung near us.

✓ Atmosphere is created whenever someone sings near us.

The verb 'sung' is the past participle form and cannot be used as the simple present tense. The correct simple present form is 'sings' to match the present tense context.