Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để tự nhiên hơn. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'is have made me regress' và dùng từ phù hợp hơn như 'helps me relax' thay vì 'regress'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có một số phần lặp lại, bạn nên nói ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long day. It boosts my energy and improves my mood, which makes me more productive in everything I do.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, 'if I was singing classes' không đúng ngữ pháp, nên dùng 'when I took singing classes'. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp lại những cụm từ không rõ nghĩa như 'Fancy nice thing'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing during my school days when I took singing classes. It was very enjoyable because I not only practiced singing but also learned about melody and rhythm, which made the experience interesting.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, 'I feel a bit sorry when singing a fun of all those' không rõ nghĩa và sai ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: Honestly, I usually prefer to sing for myself because I'm not very confident in my singing skills. Singing alone allows me to relax and express my emotions without worrying about how I sound.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng nhưng nhiều phần không rõ nghĩa và sai ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'I've been living in camping Happiness to Beaver' không đúng và gây khó hiểu. Hãy tập trung vào ý chính, dùng câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music helps the brain relax and reduces stress. Also, singing can greatly affect your emotions, making you feel more joyful and connected to others.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because after a long day of work or study is have made me regress or reflect my mind.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because after a long day of work or study it has made me regress or reflect on my mind.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'is have made' which is not a valid verb form. The correct form is 'it has made' to indicate present perfect tense. Also, 'reflect my mind' should be 'reflect on my mind' to use the correct preposition.

× Singing boost my energy and improve my moods which allow me to be more productive and efficient and everything I do.

✓ Singing boosts my energy and improves my mood which allows me to be more productive and efficient in everything I do.

The verbs 'boost' and 'improve' need to agree with the singular subject 'Singing', so they should be 'boosts' and 'improves'. Also, 'moods' should be singular 'mood' to match the context. The relative clause verb 'allow' should be 'allows' to agree with singular 'which' referring to the whole preceding clause.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing especially during my school days if I was singing classes.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing especially during my school days when I had singing classes.

The phrase 'if I was singing classes' is incorrect. It should be 'when I had singing classes' to indicate the time period. Also, 'have learned' can be simplified to 'learned' to fit the past context.

× Very enjoyable because it's not only practicing but also learn about melody and rhythm which make the experience.

✓ It was very enjoyable because it not only involved practicing but also learning about melody and rhythm which made the experience better.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb at the start. 'Not only practicing but also learn' is incorrect; it should be 'not only involved practicing but also learning' to maintain parallel structure. 'Make' should be 'made' to agree with past tense.

× Honestly, I usually prefer to sing for myself because I'm not very confident in my singing skills.

✓ Honestly, I usually prefer to sing for myself because I'm not very confident in my singing skills.

This sentence is correct and does not contain grammar mistakes based on the provided list.

× I feel a bit sorry when singing a fun of all those so I enjoy singing along where I can relax and have fun singing by myself have me express my emotions without worry about how I.

✓ I feel a bit sorry when singing in front of others, so I enjoy singing alone where I can relax and have fun, expressing my emotions without worrying about how I sound.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. 'Singing a fun of all those' is incorrect; it should be 'singing in front of others'. 'Have me express' should be 'expressing'. Also, 'without worry about how I' is incomplete and should be 'without worrying about how I sound'.

× Yes, I've been living in camping Happiness to Beaver because the melody of music have the brain relax and reduce stress.

✓ Yes, I've been living in a happy state because the melody of music helps the brain relax and reduce stress.

'Living in camping Happiness to Beaver' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'living in a happy state'. 'Have the brain relax' should be 'helps the brain relax' to use the correct verb and subject agreement.

× Also when you sing you can affect your emotion greatly which make you feel more joyful and connected to others.

✓ Also, when you sing, you can affect your emotions greatly which makes you feel more joyful and connected to others.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context. 'Which make' should be 'which makes' to agree with singular 'which' referring to the whole clause.