Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh" và cố gắng làm câu trả lời ngắn gọn hơn để tránh lặp lại ý. Bạn cũng có thể sử dụng thêm các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Whenever I find a new song I like, I often listen to it repeatedly and sing along to it.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ như "Can't Sing" nên viết thường và câu nên rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn nên dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp lại ý.

例: Yes, I learned singing in elementary school as part of our music class, where we also learned to read music notes. However, I don't think it was very effective because I still can't sing or read music notes properly.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất cụ thể và có nội dung phong phú. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như "sing for him" nhiều lần.

例: I enjoy singing for my nephew the most because he is still an infant. To lull him to sleep, I usually sing Vietnamese folk songs, which are soothing and popular in my country.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời tốt với ví dụ cụ thể, tuy nhiên nên chú ý dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như "sing along for them" không chính xác, nên là "sing along to them".

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, when I feel sad or disappointed, I often listen to my favorite songs or sing along to them, which helps me relax and improves my mood.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

The verb 'learnt' is a past tense form commonly used in British English, but in American English, 'learned' is preferred. Since the rest of the transcript uses American English conventions, 'learned' is more appropriate here.

× During our elementary school we had a subject for music which we have to learn how to sing and read the music notes.

✓ During our elementary school, we had a subject for music in which we had to learn how to sing and read music notes.

The phrase 'music notes' is more natural without the definite article 'the' because it refers to music notes in general, not specific ones. Also, 'have to' should be in past tense 'had to' to match the past context.

× During our elementary school we had a subject for music which we have to learn how to sing and read the music notes.

✓ During our elementary school, we had a subject for music in which we had to learn how to sing and read music notes.

The modal verb 'have to' should be in past tense 'had to' to agree with the past time frame 'During our elementary school'.

× However, I don't find it really effective because until now I still Can't Sing or read the music note properly.

✓ However, I don't find it really effective because until now I still can't sing or read music notes properly.

The phrase 'music note' should be plural 'music notes' because it refers to notes in general, not a single note. Also, 'Can't Sing' should be lowercase 'can't sing'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ For whom do you want to sing?

In formal English, when a preposition is used, it is more correct to place it before the relative pronoun 'whom' rather than at the end of the sentence. However, in spoken English, the original sentence is acceptable.

× Actually, I enjoy singing for my nephew the most because he is still an infant and if I want to lull him to sleep I will have to sing for him.

✓ Actually, I enjoy singing for my nephew the most because he is still an infant, and if I want to lull him to sleep, I will have to sing for him.

No grammatical number errors here, but commas are added for clarity and correct sentence structure.

× And I usually sing some Vietnamese folk songs that are really soothing and popular in our country.

✓ I usually sing some Vietnamese folk songs that are really soothing and popular in our country.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal writing; removing it improves sentence flow.

× For example, whenever I feel sad or disappointed, I often like to listen to my favorite songs or sing along for them.

✓ For example, whenever I feel sad or disappointed, I often like to listen to my favorite songs or sing along with them.

The correct preposition to use with 'sing along' is 'with' rather than 'for' when referring to songs.