Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达不够清晰，语法和词汇使用有误，导致意思难以理解。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复。

例: I didn't like singing when I was young because my mother, who is a music teacher, was very strict with me. However, now I enjoy singing a lot.

提案: 回答中存在性别代词错误和语法问题，表达不连贯。建议注意代词使用，句子结构清晰，并用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: Yes, I learned singing in high school. I had a very good music teacher who taught me a lot about music theory and practice. I really liked her because she was very patient and helpful.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不完整。建议使用完整句子，明确表达想为父母唱歌的原因，并使用连接词。

例: I want to sing for my mother and father to show them that I love them and appreciate all the help they have given me.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁表达观点，使用正确的时态和词汇。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it makes life more enjoyable and helps people feel joyful.

× When I was young I didn't sort like it because in my home my mother is a music teacher and she struck to me.

✓ When I was young I didn't sort of like it because at home my mother was a music teacher and she struck me.

这里的时态需要保持一致，描述过去的情况时，应该用过去时。'is'改为'was'，'struck to me'应为'struck me'，因为动词'strike'后不需要介词'to'。

× But now I'm God group I I like it very much.

✓ But now I'm in a good group, I like it very much.

句子结构混乱，'God group'应为'good group'，并且缺少介词'in'，需要调整句子结构使其通顺。

× Yes, In my high school I have a very good music teacher.

✓ Yes, in my high school I had a very good music teacher.

描述过去的经历时，动词应使用过去时，'have'改为'had'。

× He taught me a lot of about the music work, music knowledge.

✓ He taught me a lot about music work and music knowledge.

'a lot of about'结构不正确，应为'a lot about'，并且去掉多余的定冠词'the'。

× I like, I like she.

✓ I like her.

宾格代词使用错误，'she'应改为宾格'her'。

× She's a good teacher, I think.

✓ She's a good teacher, I think.

此句无语法错误，无需修改。

× I want for my mother and my father I want I want told the I love them and I'm very thankful the helps everything.

✓ I want to sing for my mother and my father. I want to tell them I love them and I'm very thankful for their help with everything.

句子结构混乱，缺少动词不定式和介词，'told the'应为'tell them'，'thankful the helps'应为'thankful for their help'。

× Yes, sure. I I think singing can bring happiness to people because I think singing it make people very happy and make interesting the lives.

✓ Yes, sure. I think singing can bring happiness to people because I think singing makes people very happy and makes life interesting.

主谓不一致，'singing it make'应为'singing makes'，'make interesting the lives'应为'makes life interesting'，并且去掉多余的代词。