Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法の誤りを直し、より自然で効果的な表現を使いましょう。例えば、"make"は三人称単数現在形なので"makes"に直す必要があります。また、"singing a song"よりも"singing"だけで十分です。

例: I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 意味が伝わりにくいため、明確で簡潔な答えを心がけましょう。"I RAM"は意味不明なので、正しい表現に直し、理由を具体的に述べると良いです。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing because I have been focusing on learning to play the piano.

提案: 答えが短すぎて会話が広がりません。理由や状況を付け加えて、より具体的に答えましょう。

例: I want to sing for my mother because she loves music and it makes her happy.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りを直し、内容を明確にしましょう。"Thinking"は"Singing"の間違いと思われます。また、"restless"は不安定な意味なので、"relaxed"など適切な語に変えましょう。

例: Yes, I do. Singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions and feel more relaxed. For example, when I sing my favorite songs, I usually feel joyful and calm.

× I like singing because singing a song make me happy.

✓ I like singing because singing a song makes me happy.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'singing a song'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue involving singular and plural forms.

× No, I haven't because I RAM. To how to play piano.

✓ No, I haven't because I am learning how to play the piano.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear wording 'I RAM. To how to play piano.' It should be restructured to a complete sentence with correct verb forms and articles. 'I am learning how to play the piano' is a proper expression.

× Yes, I do Thinking can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions and feel more relaxed.

✓ Yes, I do. Singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions and feel more relaxed.

The word 'Thinking' is incorrect here; the intended subject is likely 'Singing'. Also, the sentence lacks proper punctuation. Replacing 'Thinking' with 'Singing' and adding a period improves clarity and correctness.

× For example, when I think my favorite songs, I usually feel joyful and restless.

✓ For example, when I listen to my favorite songs, I usually feel joyful and relaxed.

The verb 'think' is incorrectly used with 'my favorite songs'. The correct verb is 'listen to'. Also, 'restless' contradicts the intended meaning of feeling happy and relaxed, so 'relaxed' is more appropriate.