Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“the singing have beautiful melody”应为“singing has a beautiful melody”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I like singing because it has a beautiful melody and helps me relax when I am tired.

提案: 回答语法混乱，表达不清晰，且句子结构不完整。建议使用简单明了的句子，清楚表达自己的观点，并避免重复和不必要的词汇。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because I feel nervous when a teacher teaches me, and I prefer to sing freely.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，如“the thing can spread energy”不明确。建议使用更具体的词汇和连贯的句子结构，清晰表达想法。

例: I want to sing for my friends, parents, and others because music can spread positive energy. When they listen to my singing, I hope they feel comfortable, relaxed, and happy.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误和语法问题，如“seeing”应为“singing”，“the the music have”应为“the music has”。建议注意拼写和语法，使用连贯的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because music has a beautiful melody and is smooth. When people sing, they feel relaxed and energized.

× Yes, I like singing because the singing have beautiful melody and they can make me feel relax if I feel tired when I listening the singing.

✓ Yes, I like singing because the singing has a beautiful melody and it can make me feel relaxed if I feel tired when I listen to the singing.

这里'singing'作为不可数名词，谓语动词应使用单数形式'have'改为'has'。'melody'前需要加不定冠词'a'表示单数。'they'指代不明确，改为单数'it'。'feel relax'应为'feel relaxed'，形容词用来描述感受。'listening the singing'应为'listen to the singing'，动词后需加介词'to'。

× No, I haven't ever learned how to sing because I'm favorite singer but I don't like the teacher teach me to learn how to sing because I feel it's nervous and it's not free.

✓ No, I haven't ever learned how to sing because I'm a favorite singer but I don't like the teacher teaching me to learn how to sing because I feel nervous and it's not free.

'I'm favorite singer'缺少冠词，应为'I'm a favorite singer'。'the teacher teach me'应改为'teacher teaching me'，动词需用现在分词形式表示正在进行的动作。'I feel it's nervous'中'nervous'形容词不应修饰'it'，应直接说'I feel nervous'。

× I want to sing for my friends, my parents and other peoples because I think the the thing can spread energy.

✓ I want to sing for my friends, my parents and other people because I think the thing can spread energy.

'peoples'是复数形式，表示民族或族群，指人时应使用'people'。重复使用'the'应去掉一个。

× When people listen to my things, they can feel comfortable and relax and happy. Encourage and I will feel.

✓ When people listen to my songs, they can feel comfortable, relaxed, and happy. I will feel encouraged too.

'my things'表达不准确，应为'my songs'。'feel comfortable and relax and happy'中'relax'应为形容词'relaxed'，且并列形容词间应加逗号。'Encourage and I will feel'结构混乱，应改为'I will feel encouraged too'。

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people because the the music have beautiful melody and it's smoothly and when people singing they feel relax and they have energy.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because the music has a beautiful melody and it's smooth, and when people sing they feel relaxed and have energy.

'seeing'应为'singing'。'the the music'重复，应去掉一个'the'。'music have'应为'music has'，主谓一致。'beautiful melody'前加冠词'a'。'it's smoothly'中'smoothly'为副词，应改为形容词'smooth'。'when people singing'应为'when people sing'，动词用原形。'feel relax'应为'feel relaxed'。