Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You should try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid redundancy and use a clear topic sentence. For example, say 'No, I don't like singing because I am not good at it.'

例: No, I don't like singing because I am not good at it.

提案: Try to use correct tense and avoid repetition. Also, make your answer clearer and more structured. For example, 'Yes, I took a singing class when I was in third grade as part of my drama studies.'

例: Yes, I took a singing class when I was in third grade as part of my drama studies.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly. For example, 'I don't like singing for others, but I sometimes sing alone in my car while listening to my favorite bands.'

例: I don't like singing for others, but I sometimes sing alone in my car while listening to my favorite bands.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting details. For example, 'Yes, I think singing can make people feel free and happy, especially when they are feeling unwell.'

例: Yes, I think singing can make people feel free and happy, especially when they are feeling unwell.

× No, I don't like it. Why? Because I very awful singing.

✓ No, I don't like it. Why? Because I am very awful at singing.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'am' and the preposition 'at' after 'awful'. 'Awful' is an adjective and needs a linking verb and a preposition to correctly describe the ability in singing. The correct structure is 'I am very awful at singing.'

× Yes, when I study drama I have a class for singing in in in the third grade.

✓ Yes, when I studied drama, I had a class for singing in the third grade.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the verbs should be in the past tense. 'Study' should be 'studied' and 'have' should be 'had'. Also, the repeated 'in' is a typographical error and should be removed.

× I don't like seeing when I sing is when I drive my car alone and singing different song from the by the groups of like to listen.

✓ I don't like singing. When I sing, it is when I drive my car alone and sing different songs from the groups I like to listen to.

The original sentence has pronoun confusion and incorrect verb forms. 'Seeing' should be 'singing'. The phrase 'singing different song from the by the groups of like to listen' is unclear and needs restructuring. 'Songs' should be plural, and the relative clause should be 'groups I like to listen to'. Also, 'singing' should be 'sing' to match the subject.

× Yes, I think it's make feel freedom when you're sick if you like it.

✓ Yes, I think it makes you feel free when you're sick if you like it.

The phrase 'it's make feel freedom' is grammatically incorrect. 'It' should be followed by 'makes' (third person singular), and 'feel freedom' should be 'feel free'. Also, 'you' is needed as the object of 'makes'. The sentence is corrected to 'it makes you feel free'.