Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I love singing because it refreshes my mind, and I often sing many songs when I have free time."

例: Yes, I love singing because it refreshes my mind. Moreover, I often sing many songs whenever I have free time, which helps me relax and feel happy.

提案: Your answer needs better grammar and clearer structure. Use past tense correctly and link your ideas logically. For example, say "Yes, I learnt singing during my school days. I was excited to attend music classes and even went to a singing camp when I was 15 or 16 years old."

例: Yes, I learnt singing during my school days. I was very excited to attend music classes, and when I was 15, I went to a singing camp, which was like a summer camp focused on music.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but can be more concise and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, say "I want to sing for my husband because there are many romantic songs, some from Bollywood and others in different languages. Singing these songs helps me express my love and feelings for him."

例: I want to sing for my husband because there are many romantic songs, some from Bollywood and others in different languages. By singing these songs, I can express my love and feelings towards him.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and grammar correction. Use linking words and avoid unclear phrases. For example, say "Yes, definitely. Singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings. For instance, I sing many songs every evening, which makes me feel joyful."

例: Yes, definitely. Singing brings a lot of happiness because it helps people express their feelings to others. For example, I sing many songs every evening, and it always lifts my mood.

× Yes, of course I love to sing because whenever I sing it refresh my mind and sometimes when I free I sing a lot of songs.

✓ Yes, of course I love to sing because whenever I sing it refreshes my mind and sometimes when I am free I sing a lot of songs.

The verb 'refresh' should be in the third person singular form 'refreshes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, the phrase 'when I free' is missing the verb 'am' to form the correct present tense 'when I am free'.

× Here's definitely when I was in my school time.

✓ It was definitely when I was in my school time.

The phrase 'Here's definitely' is incorrect in this context. The correct past tense expression is 'It was definitely' to indicate a past time.

× That time I was so excited to attend my music course.

✓ At that time I was so excited to attend my music course.

The phrase 'That time' should be 'At that time' to correctly indicate a specific past time.

× And I remember a time when I was 15 or 16 years old, I attend my singing camping.

✓ And I remember a time when I was 15 or 16 years old, I attended my singing camp.

The verb 'attend' should be in the past tense 'attended' to match the past time reference. Also, 'camping' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'camp'.

× So that time I learn singing.

✓ So at that time I learned singing.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to match the past time context. Also, adding 'at' before 'that time' improves clarity.

× I find this question so interesting because I want to sing for my husband and there's so many romantic songs.

✓ I find this question so interesting because I want to sing for my husband and there are so many romantic songs.

The phrase 'there's' is a contraction of 'there is' which is singular, but it should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'songs'.

× So I just want to sing a lot of song my to my husband, for my husband and just to express my love and my feelings toward him.

✓ So I just want to sing a lot of songs to my husband, for my husband, and just to express my love and my feelings toward him.

The word 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match 'a lot of', which requires a plural noun. Also, 'my to my husband' is incorrect; it should be 'to my husband'.

× I think that seeing bring a lot of happiness in people's lives, goes with the hypothesis Singing we can express our feelings to someone else.

✓ I think that singing brings a lot of happiness in people's lives; it goes with the idea that through singing we can express our feelings to someone else.

The verb 'seeing' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. The verb 'bring' should be 'brings' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× Apart from that, just like me, in every evening I sing a lot of songs.

✓ Apart from that, just like me, every evening I sing a lot of songs.

The phrase 'in every evening' is incorrect; the correct preposition is omitted here, so it should be 'every evening'.