Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了不喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，有语法错误和重复表达。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I don't really like singing because I think I have no talent for it. When I sing, I feel embarrassed about my voice, so I usually avoid singing in public.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“thing skills”不明确。建议使用正确的词汇和时态，表达更清楚。

例: Yes, I took some singing lessons after school when I was in primary school to improve my singing skills. However, I gave up after a few lessons because I was unhappy with my voice.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不连贯的问题。建议使用正确的时态和连词，使表达更流畅自然。

例: Honestly, I don't like singing in front of others because my singing skills are poor and I feel embarrassed. I prefer to sing alone because it helps me relax.

提案: 回答中有多处语法错误和词汇使用错误，如“seeing”应为“singing”，“improve connected”表达不清晰。建议注意词汇准确性和句子完整性。

例: Of course, singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions and connect with others. For example, at concerts, thousands of people sing together, creating a joyful atmosphere.

× I really avoid seeing.

✓ I really avoid singing.

这里的动词avoid后面应该接动名词形式，原句中的seeing是看见的意思，语境中应为singing（唱歌）。避免使用错误的动词形式。

× I used to take some after school singing lessons in order to improve my thing skills and some voice.

✓ I used to take some after school singing lessons in order to improve my singing skills and my voice.

原句中'thing skills'是错误的词汇，应为'singing skills'表示唱歌技巧；'some voice'不合适，应为'my voice'表示我的声音。

× But after a few lessons I feel I give up because I can't bear how terrible my voice was.

✓ But after a few lessons I felt I had to give up because I couldn't bear how terrible my voice was.

描述过去的事情，动词时态应使用过去时，原句中feel和give up用现在时不合适，应改为felt和had to give up。

× I really think in front of others because my singing skill is quite poor and I will feel embarrassed and worry that people probably not enjoy listening to my singing.

✓ I really don't want to sing in front of others because my singing skill is quite poor and I feel embarrassed and worry that people probably will not enjoy listening to my singing.

原句缺少否定表达，'think in front of others'不通顺，应为'don't want to sing in front of others'；'people probably not enjoy'缺少助动词will，时态和语法错误。

× So I prefer to sing when I was alone.

✓ So I prefer to sing when I am alone.

表达习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时，'when I was alone'应改为'when I am alone'。

× Of course, seeing can definitely bring happiness to people because it's of great help to express our emotions and improve connected.

✓ Of course, singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it's of great help to express our emotions and improve connection.

原句中的'seeing'应为'singing'，表示唱歌；'improve connected'语法错误，应为'improve connection'。

× For example, at a concert which thousands of people get together, everyone chills loudly and sing along which create an.

✓ For example, at a concert where thousands of people get together, everyone cheers loudly and sings along, which creates a great atmosphere.

原句结构混乱，'which thousands of people get together'应改为'where thousands of people get together'；'chills loudly'错误，应为'cheers loudly'；动词单复数不一致，'sing'应为'sings'；句子未完成，补充完整表达。