Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences complete and clear. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. For example, say 'I like singing because it helps me feel peaceful and relaxed, especially when I face problems or feel sad.'

例: I like singing because it helps me feel peaceful and relaxed. When I face problems or feel sad, singing a song lifts my mood and makes me feel better.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has many pauses. Try to give a full, clear answer with proper sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. For example, say 'I haven't learned how to sing yet, but I would like to learn in the future because I enjoy singing in my free time.'

例: I haven't learned how to sing yet, but I would like to learn in the future because I enjoy singing in my free time.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to make your sentences complete and use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons. For example, say 'I want to sing for my closest person because we share many memories together.'

例: I want to sing for my closest person because we share many happy memories, and singing for him makes me feel connected.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is unclear. Try to use correct grammar and explain your ideas clearly. Use linking words like 'because' to connect your points. For example, say 'Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because it expresses different emotions and the singer conveys deep feelings through the song.'

例: Of course, singing can bring happiness to people because it expresses different emotions, and the singer conveys deep feelings through the song.

× Yes, I like singing because it helps my feel peaceful and relax.

✓ Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel peaceful and relaxed.

The pronoun 'my' is incorrect here; it should be 'me' as the object of the verb 'helps'. Also, 'relax' should be 'relaxed' to correctly describe the state.

× Relax when I'm facing problem or feeling sad.

✓ I feel relaxed when I'm facing problems or feeling sad.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I feel' completes the sentence. Also, 'problem' should be plural 'problems' to generalize the statement.

× When I sing a song it gives me a peace and degrees.

✓ When I sing a song, it gives me peace and relief.

The article 'a' before 'peace' is incorrect because 'peace' is an uncountable noun. Also, 'degrees' is incorrect in this context; 'relief' or a similar word fits better.

× My solution like singing a song leave my mood and.

✓ My solution is singing a song to lift my mood.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'is' and rephrasing clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I haven't learned how to sing, but in future I would like to learn, uh, singing because in, I like to sing a song in every, in my free time, so I will, uh, in my.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing, but in the future, I would like to learn singing because I like to sing songs in my free time.

Added 'the' before 'future' for correct article usage. Removed unnecessary fillers and incomplete phrases to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× I like to sing a song for my very closest person because he and me have very memories and we can I can sing a song for him because.

✓ I like to sing songs for my closest person because he and I have many memories, and I can sing songs for him.

'Me' should be 'I' as the subject of the verb 'have'. 'Very memories' is incorrect; 'many memories' is appropriate. The sentence was also restructured for clarity.

× Of course singing can give happiness to person because singing have very different expression and in a song singer have deepest line for the person and person and the people.

✓ Of course, singing can give happiness to people because singing has very different expressions, and in a song, the singer has the deepest lines for the person and the people.

'Person' should be plural 'people' to generalize. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'singing' and 'singer'. 'Expression' should be plural 'expressions' to match 'very different'. Added articles and restructured for clarity.