Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 중복되는 표현을 줄이고 더 구체적인 이유를 추가하면 좋겠습니다. 예를 들어, 노래를 부를 때 느끼는 감정이나 상황을 설명해 보세요.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For instance, when I sing my favorite songs, I feel more cheerful and less stressed.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 혼란스러워 보입니다. 질문에 직접적으로 답하고, 배운 적이 없으면 그 이유나 경험을 간단히 설명하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons, but I enjoy singing casually at home or with friends.

提案: 답변이 다소 모호하고 문법적으로도 개선이 필요합니다. 'Beloved' 대신 구체적인 사람을 언급하고, 문장을 명확하게 구성해 보세요.

例: I haven't thought about it much, but I would like to sing for my family someday because they always support me.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 내용도 좋지만, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 더 논리적으로 만들고 구체적인 예시를 추가하면 더 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because, for example, when I listen to music, it lifts my mood. Therefore, singing can help people relieve stress and improve their mental health.

× I prefer to sing because it makes me happy when I sing.

✓ I prefer singing because it makes me happy when I sing.

'Prefer' is often followed by a gerund (-ing form) when expressing general likes or dislikes. Using 'prefer singing' sounds more natural than 'prefer to sing' in this context.

× I've never learned how to sing, but I got it.

✓ I've never learned how to sing, but I get it.

The phrase 'I got it' is past tense and does not fit the present perfect context. 'I get it' (present tense) is more appropriate to express understanding.

× As far as I know.

✓ As far as I know, I have never learned how to sing.

'As far as I know' is a dependent clause and cannot stand alone as a sentence. It should be connected to a main clause to form a complete sentence.

× I don't know, I can't remember how to sing.

✓ I don't know; I can't remember how to sing.

Two independent clauses should be properly connected with a semicolon or conjunction to avoid a run-on sentence.

× I never thought about it, but someday I wanna sing for Beloved.

✓ I have never thought about it, but someday I want to sing for Beloved.

'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech. Also, 'never thought' in past tense conflicts with 'someday' indicating future; present perfect 'have never thought' fits better.

× I wish he liked it, likes it.

✓ I wish he liked it.

'I wish' is followed by past tense to express a hypothetical situation. 'Likes it' is present tense and incorrect here.

× So singing is really helpful to stressful people and music can heal human's mind.

✓ So singing is really helpful to stressed people and music can heal the human mind.

'Stressful people' is incorrect; 'stressed people' is the correct adjective form. Also, 'human's mind' should be 'the human mind' to refer generally to all humans.