Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้นและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ เช่น การใช้คำว่า 'long' ซ้ำหลายครั้ง นอกจากนี้ควรจัดโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

例: Yes, I absolutely enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long day at work and lifts my mood.

提案: คำตอบนี้ควรชัดเจนและมีโครงสร้างที่ดีขึ้น ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็นและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดให้สมเหตุสมผล

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons, but I have watched some tutorial videos on Facebook and WhatsApp to learn basic techniques.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคสมบูรณ์และชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: I would like to sing for my friends because singing together makes me feel happier and more relaxed since we share a close bond.

提案: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เข้าใจและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องเพื่อสื่อความหมายได้ดีขึ้น

例: Absolutely, I believe singing can help people feel better after a long day at work by reducing stress and improving their mood.

× Singing can help people feel happy from their long work, their for their long long working day and also reduce their bad feeling.

✓ Singing can help people feel happy after their long workday and also reduce their bad feelings.

The preposition 'from' is incorrectly used; 'after' is appropriate to indicate the time following the workday. Also, 'their for their long long working day' is redundant and incorrect. 'Bad feeling' should be plural as 'bad feelings' to match the context.

× No, I've never learned how to sing, but umm just was a tip.

✓ No, I've never learned how to sing, but I just saw a tip.

The phrase 'just was a tip' is incorrect. The correct past tense verb is 'saw' to indicate the action of seeing a tip. Also, the subject 'I' is missing before 'just saw'.

× How to sing on the online platform for Instinct on Facebook onto WhatsApp with their shared video of the people learned about singing.

✓ How to sing on the online platform Instinct on Facebook and WhatsApp with shared videos of people learning about singing.

The prepositions 'for' and 'onto' are incorrectly used. 'On' is appropriate for platforms. Also, 'their shared video of the people learned about singing' is awkward; it should be 'shared videos of people learning about singing'.

× I really want to sing for my friends because when I'm singing with my friends it's make me feel happier and funny because we are close and we can express our, uh, posture.

✓ I really want to sing for my friends because when I'm singing with them it makes me feel happier and funny because we are close and we can express our, uh, posture.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'with my friends' is repeated unnecessarily; 'with them' is more concise.

× I really want to sing for my friends because when I'm singing with my friends it's make me feel happier and funny because we are close and we can express our, uh, posture.

✓ I really want to sing for my friends because when I'm singing with my friends it makes me feel happier and funny because we are close and we can express our, uh, posture.

No preposition error here; previous correction addressed subject-verb agreement.

× Absolutely yes, thinking can make people feel good after their long working and people will feel uh will feel less obstret and discharge their mood and funny OPS.

✓ Absolutely yes, singing can make people feel good after their long work, and people will feel less stressed and can improve their mood and have fun.

'Thinking' is incorrect; it should be 'singing' as per context. 'Obstret' is a misspelling of 'stress'. 'Discharge their mood and funny OPS' is unclear; corrected to 'improve their mood and have fun'. Pronouns and word choice are corrected for clarity.