Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、冗長な表現や繰り返しが多いです。より簡潔で効果的な表現を心がけ、文法的な正確さも向上させましょう。例えば、「I don't like singing because I'm not good at it, but I enjoy listening to others sing because it makes me feel comfortable.」のようにまとめると良いです。

例: I don't enjoy singing because I'm not very good at it. However, I love listening to others sing as it makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: 回答が少し不自然で、文法的な誤りや冗長な表現があります。より明確で簡潔に答え、接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげましょう。例えば、「I learned singing in junior high school music class, but I didn't enjoy the teaching method, so I still don't like singing.」のように表現すると良いです。

例: I learned how to sing in junior high school music class, but I didn't enjoy the way the teacher taught, so I still don't like singing.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法や表現が不自然で冗長です。接続詞を使い、より流暢で自然な英語にしましょう。例えば、「Although I don't enjoy singing much, I want to sing for my family because they don't judge me and singing with them makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.」のように言えます。

例: Although I don't enjoy singing much, I like to sing for my family because they never judge me, and singing together makes me feel relaxed.

提案: 回答が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。具体的な経験を簡潔に述べ、論理的に話を展開しましょう。例えば、「I believe singing brings happiness because when I attended a party in America, singing loudly with others made me very happy and I enjoyed the moment.」のように表現すると良いです。

例: I believe singing can bring happiness. For example, at a party in America, singing loudly with friends made me feel very joyful and I really enjoyed it.

× I don't like singing, like I hate singing 'cause I'm very bad at singing, but I like to listen to someone singing 'cause it makes me like so comfortable and I like to hear someone who is good at singing.

✓ I don't like singing; I hate singing because I'm very bad at it, but I like to listen to someone singing because it makes me feel so comfortable, and I like to hear someone who is good at singing.

The original sentence has awkward and repetitive use of 'like' and 'singing'. The phrase 'makes me like so comfortable' is incorrect; 'like' should be removed to improve clarity and correctness. Also, 'I like to listen to someone singing' is correct, but the sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary fillers and clarifying the meaning.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing when I was in junior high school in music class, but I didn't like to sing the way the teacher taught me and I just don't like singing so.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was in junior high school in music class, but I didn't like singing the way the teacher taught me, and I just don't like singing now.

The use of 'have learned' with a specific past time 'when I was in junior high school' is incorrect; simple past 'learned' should be used. Also, 'didn't like to sing' is better expressed as 'didn't like singing' for naturalness. The phrase 'I just don't like singing so' is awkward; adding 'now' clarifies the meaning.

× I don't really enjoy singing but I want to sing for my family 'cause they don't judge me to sing bad and they like they sing with me so it makes me like comfortable and relaxed to sing.

✓ I don't really enjoy singing, but I want to sing for my family because they don't judge me for singing badly, and they like to sing with me, so it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed when I sing.

The phrase 'judge me to sing bad' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'judge me for singing badly'. Also, 'they like they sing with me' is ungrammatical; it should be 'they like to sing with me'. The phrase 'makes me like comfortable' should be 'makes me feel comfortable'. These corrections improve preposition and verb usage.

× I think singing can bring happiness to people 'cause because when I was in America, I went to this party and we sang like loudly, and it makes me so happy and I wouldn't be there forever and I really liked it.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because when I was in America, I went to a party and we sang loudly, and it made me so happy. I wish I could have stayed there forever, and I really liked it.

The phrase 'we sang like loudly' is incorrect; 'like' should be removed. 'It makes me so happy' should be in past tense 'it made me so happy' to match the past context. 'I wouldn't be there forever' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'I wish I could have stayed there forever'. These corrections fix tense and expression errors.