Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语法和用词不准确，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇和语法，避免重复。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me happy and relaxed. Also, I enjoy sharing my singing skills with my friends.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，内容混乱。建议使用简单明了的句子，清楚说明学习唱歌的原因。

例: Yes, I have learned how to sing because I wanted to perform a song for my friend's birthday party and surprise her.

提案: 回答中有很多犹豫词和语法错误，表达不连贯。建议练习流利表达，使用连贯的句子描述对象和原因。

例: I want to sing for my best friend Kelly. We used to spend a lot of time together, but now she is very busy. Singing for her is my way to show I care.

提案: 回答含糊不清，语法和词汇错误严重。建议用简单句子表达观点，并给出理由。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps people feel joyful and relaxed.

× I think same can bring many happy to me and feel me very relaxing and I can show the same skill to my friends.

✓ I think singing can bring me much happiness and make me feel very relaxed, and I can show the same skill to my friends.

这里'same'用法错误，应该用'singing'表示唱歌这个动作；'many happy'应改为'much happiness'，因为'happiness'是不可数名词；'feel me very relaxing'应改为'make me feel very relaxed'，因为'relaxing'是形容词，需用被动结构表达感受。

× I have learn how to sing because I want to sing a song with my friends and better and I want to give her a birthday, birthday party and I want to know the thing to give me a surprise.

✓ I have learned how to sing because I want to sing a song with my friends better, and I want to give her a birthday party, and I want to know what to prepare to give her a surprise.

'have learn'应为现在完成时，正确形式是'have learned'；句子结构混乱，需调整表达使意思清晰。

× before we are often together, play together, but now he is very, she is very busy.

✓ Before, we often spent time together and played together, but now she is very busy.

代词使用不一致，前文指的是'Kelly'，应统一使用'she'，避免混淆。

× So I can't, uh, have more time to play with her. So I, I want to, so I sing for her to make her, her.

✓ So I don't have much time to play with her. So I want to sing for her to make her happy.

句子结构不完整且重复，需补充完整表达，明确目的和结果。

× because people have uh, uh, they, they like, uh, start singing people and they can offer him to get happiness.

✓ Because people like to start singing, and it can bring them happiness.

代词使用错误，'offer him to get happiness'表达不当，应改为'bring them happiness'，使句意明确且符合英语习惯。