Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est un peu redondante et manque de fluidité naturelle. Essayez de structurer votre réponse avec une phrase principale claire, suivie d'une explication concise, en évitant les répétitions inutiles.

例: No, I don't like singing because I don't have a good voice. However, I enjoy listening to music as it relaxes me.

提案: Votre réponse manque de clarté et de structure. Utilisez une phrase principale claire et développez avec des détails précis en utilisant des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence.

例: Yes, I have tried to learn singing, but I find it difficult because I feel my voice is not strong enough.

提案: La réponse est confuse et contient des erreurs grammaticales. Essayez de formuler une réponse claire avec une structure correcte et évitez les répétitions inutiles.

例: I would like to sing for myself because it makes me feel happy and confident.

提案: Votre réponse est un peu désorganisée et contient des erreurs. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour structurer votre réponse et exprimez vos idées clairement avec des exemples précis.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and overcome sadness.

× I like and I love to listen to some song, but I don't like to sing singing because I don't have a good voice who make me and give me the power to sing.

✓ I like and I love to listen to some songs, but I don't like to sing because I don't have a good voice that makes me and gives me the power to sing.

The word 'song' should be plural 'songs' because it refers to multiple songs. Also, 'who' is incorrectly used for 'voice'; it should be 'that' as it refers to an object. The verbs 'make' and 'give' need to agree with the singular subject 'voice', so they should be 'makes' and 'gives'.

× Yes, actually I trying to learn how to sing, but it's that thing isn't working with me because I don't have a good voice.

✓ Yes, actually I am trying to learn how to sing, but that thing isn't working for me because I don't have a good voice.

The verb 'trying' needs an auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'I am trying'. Also, 'it's that thing' is awkward; 'that thing' alone is sufficient. The preposition 'with' should be 'for' in this context to indicate something is not effective for the speaker.

× I want to sing for myself because I think myself is the one who deserve every good words.

✓ I want to sing for myself because I think I am the one who deserves every good word.

The reflexive pronoun 'myself' is incorrectly used as the subject; it should be 'I'. The verb 'deserve' needs to agree with the singular subject 'I', so it should be 'deserves'. 'Every good words' is incorrect; 'words' should be singular 'word' after 'every'.

× So yeah, I want to sing for myself and sing to my.

✓ So yeah, I want to sing for myself and sing to myself.

The phrase 'sing to my' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'sing to myself' to correctly use the reflexive pronoun as the object of the verb.

× Yes I think though I think singing can bring happiness to people because sometime a single singing help them to relaxing to.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because sometimes a single song helps them to relax.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'A single singing' is incorrect; it should be 'a single song'. The verb 'help' needs to agree with singular subject 'song', so it should be 'helps'. 'Relaxing to' is incorrect; it should be 'to relax'.

× Go out of depression and to to to be better.

✓ Go out of depression and be better.

The phrase 'to to to be better' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'be better' without 'to' in this context.