Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some language errors and unclear phrases, such as "go to character with my friends often," which affects naturalness and clarity. Try to avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and coherent. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it instantly boosts my energy and lifts my mood, especially when I'm feeling stressed or tired. For example, singing along with my favourite songs makes me feel more positive and motivated. That's why I often sing with my friends during gatherings.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well and provides supporting details. However, there are some grammatical errors, such as "a by a well known" and tense inconsistency in "Since then, I enjoyed." To improve, use correct grammar and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing in school by joining the singing club, which was led by a well-known local singer. This experience inspired my passion for music and helped me improve my vocal skills. Since then, I have enjoyed singing whenever I have free time because it is good for my health.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and lacks clear structure. For example, "I also sings" should be "I also sing," and "we do practice on their singing classes" is unclear. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

例: I like to sing for my friends and sometimes for my mom because she enjoys listening to me. I also sing with my children when we practice for their singing classes together.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes examples, but there are minor grammatical issues, such as "lift our mood" instead of "lifts our mood," and the last sentence is incomplete. To improve, use correct verb forms and complete your ideas clearly, linking sentences smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe singing definitely brings happiness to people because it helps release positive energy and lifts our mood. For example, whenever I sing my favourite song, I instantly feel less stressed and sometimes even forget about my problems. Therefore, I think singing is a wonderful way to improve our emotional well-being.

× That's why I go to character with my friends often.

✓ That's why I go to karaoke with my friends often.

The phrase 'go to character' is incorrect because 'character' is not the appropriate noun here. The intended meaning is likely 'karaoke', a place where people sing. Using the correct preposition and noun improves clarity.

× Since then, I enjoyed singing whenever I have free time because it's healthy.

✓ Since then, I have enjoyed singing whenever I have free time because it's healthy.

The phrase 'Since then' requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I enjoyed' is simple past and does not fit this context.

× I also sings for my children and we do practice on their singing classes.

✓ I also sing for my children and we practice their singing classes.

The verb 'sings' does not agree with the subject 'I' and should be 'sing'. Also, 'do practice on their singing classes' is awkward; 'practice their singing classes' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× That's why I think the singing is a wonderful way.

✓ That's why I think singing is a wonderful way.

The definite article 'the' before 'singing' is unnecessary here because 'singing' is used in a general sense. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.