Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: आपके उत्तर में भावनाएँ स्पष्ट हैं, लेकिन वाक्य संरचना और शब्द चयन में सुधार की आवश्यकता है। उत्तर को अधिक प्राकृतिक और प्रभावी बनाने के लिए सरल और स्पष्ट भाषा का उपयोग करें, और अनावश्यक शब्दों से बचें।

例: I don't enjoy singing in front of others because I feel shy. Instead, I like listening to music as it helps me relax and enjoy various styles without any pressure.

提案: आपके उत्तर में विचार स्पष्ट हैं, लेकिन व्याकरण और वाक्य संरचना में त्रुटियाँ हैं। अपने उत्तर को सरल और स्पष्ट वाक्यों में विभाजित करें, और सही व्याकरण का उपयोग करें।

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because it was not part of my curriculum. However, I admire singers for their emotional expression. I have always been more interested in other subjects like gardening and sports.

提案: आपका उत्तर अच्छा है, लेकिन 'a close friends' में व्याकरण की गलती है। इसके अलावा, आप उत्तर को और अधिक प्रभावी बनाने के लिए कुछ और विशिष्ट उदाहरण जोड़ सकते हैं।

例: If I get a chance, I would like to sing for my family members or close friends. Singing for them feels personal and meaningful because they appreciate my efforts. Their support encourages me to improve and enjoy singing even more.

提案: आपका उत्तर स्पष्ट और संगठित है। आप इसे और बेहतर बनाने के लिए कुछ और विशिष्ट उदाहरण या व्यक्तिगत अनुभव जोड़ सकते हैं।

例: Singing is considered therapeutic because it helps people express emotions and relieve stress. For example, I feel happier and more relaxed when I sing my favorite songs alone or with friends.

× I'm not more fond of performing songs because I feel shy when I have to perform in front of others.

✓ I'm not fond of performing songs because I feel shy when I have to perform in front of others.

The phrase 'not more fond' is incorrect because 'fond' is a non-gradable adjective and does not take comparative forms like 'more'. The correct expression is simply 'not fond'.

× No, I have never taken a formal singing lessons because it wasn't included in my curriculum, but I do appreciate singers because they had so much emotions and feelings in their singing abilities rather than I always drawn to other subjects like growing and sports activities.

✓ No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because they weren't included in my curriculum, but I do appreciate singers because they have so much emotion and feeling in their singing abilities, whereas I have always been drawn to other subjects like growing and sports activities.

'A formal singing lessons' is incorrect because 'lessons' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'it wasn't' should be 'they weren't' to agree with plural 'lessons'. 'Had so much emotions' should be 'have so much emotion' because 'emotion' is uncountable here and present tense is appropriate. 'Rather than I always drawn' is incorrect; it should be 'whereas I have always been drawn' to correctly express contrast and tense.

× If I get a chance, I would like to sing for my family members or maybe a close friends.

✓ If I get a chance, I would like to sing for my family members or maybe a close friend.

'A close friends' is incorrect because 'friends' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. It should be 'a close friend' to match the singular article.

× Singing is always considered as a therapeutic process because it allows individuals to express their emotions and can be great way to relieve stress.

✓ Singing is always considered a therapeutic process because it allows individuals to express their emotions and can be a great way to relieve stress.

The phrase 'considered as' is incorrect; 'considered' should be followed directly by the noun phrase without 'as'. Also, 'can be great way' is missing the article 'a' before 'great way'.