Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'tone deaf'라는 표현이 조금 부정적으로 들릴 수 있으므로 좀 더 긍정적인 표현을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결어를 조금 더 활용하여 답변의 흐름을 부드럽게 만들면 좋겠습니다.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Even though I'm not a professional singer, I love singing my favorite ballads, which always make me feel calm and happy. Moreover, singing with my friends at karaoke is a great way to bond and share our passion for music.

提案: 답변이 명확하지만, 'high pitched tones' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 문장 간 연결어를 추가하여 답변을 더 논리적으로 만들면 좋겠습니다.

例: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I try to improve by singing along to different songs. Since many of my friends enjoy singing, it's a fun hobby that helps me relax and connect with them. For instance, I often practice Korean ballads because they include challenging high notes.

提案: 답변이 구체적이고 자연스럽지만, 마지막 문장에서 'a song named Champion' 대신 'a song called "Champion"'와 같은 표현이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장 연결어를 조금 더 활용하면 좋겠습니다.

例: I'd like to sing for my friends and family because sharing music with loved ones is very enjoyable. Singing at gatherings always lifts the atmosphere and makes everyone happy. For example, someday I want to sing a song called "Champion" to cheer up my family since they are my biggest supporters.

提案: 답변이 다소 미완성된 느낌이며, 마지막 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 또한, 'over the moon'과 같은 표현은 좋지만, 문장 구조를 좀 더 명확히 하고, 마지막 부분을 완성하여 답변을 마무리하는 것이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. I often hum or sing to myself when I'm alone, especially during daily tasks like showering or cooking, which instantly lifts my mood. Moreover, singing together with others at concerts or festivals creates a strong sense of community and joy.

× For example, I often practice Korean ballads because they challenge high pitched tones.

✓ For example, I often practice Korean ballads because they challenge high-pitched tones.

The phrase 'high pitched' should be hyphenated as 'high-pitched' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This clarifies that the tones are characterized by being high in pitch.

× Moreover, singing together with others at concerts or festivals creates a strong sense of.

✓ Moreover, singing together with others at concerts or festivals creates a strong sense of community.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly after 'a strong sense of'. It needs a noun to complete the phrase, such as 'community', to convey the intended meaning clearly.