Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding specific reasons or examples. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially when I am doing daily chores like cleaning or making the bed. I usually sing for my own pleasure rather than for others, as it helps me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words and more varied vocabulary. Also, try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas into one sentence.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I was never deeply interested in pursuing it seriously. Instead, I sang casually for my own enjoyment without considering it as a career or serious hobby.

提案: Good answer with clear ideas. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your sentences and add a concluding sentence to summarize your feelings or thoughts.

例: I would love to sing for my friend because she enjoys listening to me. However, since she lives abroad, she cannot hear me in person. Although I suggested singing over a video call, she prefers a live performance, which makes it difficult.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and a bit unclear at the end. Try to finish your thoughts fully and use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. Also, avoid vague phrases and provide specific examples.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and enjoy beautiful melodies. For instance, when my friend sings with her smooth voice, everyone feels joyful and entertained.

× No, I have never learned how to sing because I didn't find singing so interesting that I wanted to go for singing classes from when I was a child.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing because I didn't find singing interesting enough to want to go to singing classes when I was a child.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect use of 'so interesting that I wanted to go for singing classes'. The correction simplifies the sentence and uses 'interesting enough to want to' which is grammatically correct and clearer.

× I have suggested her the idea of singing through video call, but she said that she wanted to hear it live.

✓ I have suggested to her the idea of singing through a video call, but she said that she wanted to hear it live.

The verb 'suggest' requires the preposition 'to' before the indirect object. Also, 'video call' should be preceded by the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do believe that singing can bring great happiness to people as it is a way of relaxing and enjoying the melodious voice for example, when my friend sings, we all enjoy the smooth voice such that we find it really pleasurable and we.

✓ Yes, I do believe that singing can bring great happiness to people as it is a way of relaxing and enjoying melodious voices. For example, when my friend sings, we all enjoy her smooth voice, and we find it really pleasurable.

The original sentence is incomplete and has run-on structure. It lacks proper punctuation and clarity. The correction breaks it into two sentences, adds necessary articles, and completes the thought for clarity and grammatical correctness.