Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and grammatical errors. Try to express your feelings more clearly and avoid repeating words. Also, use correct vocabulary, for example, 'singing' instead of 'seeing'. Keep your answer concise and natural.

例: To be honest, I don't like singing because I feel unmusical and it frustrates me when I try to sing.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical mistakes and some unclear phrases. Use past tense correctly and clarify your ideas. Also, avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: Yes, when I was young, my mom took me to singing classes because she is a big fan of musicals. She wanted me to learn since she didn't have the chance to study music when she was young.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and repetition. Try to use correct expressions like 'unmusical' and avoid repeating words. Also, make your sentences more fluent and natural.

例: I prefer to sing only for myself, especially when no one else is around, because I know I'm unmusical and don't want others to hear my bad voice.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but contains many errors and unclear phrases. Use correct vocabulary like 'singing' instead of 'seeing' and 'singing' instead of 'saying'. Also, structure your sentences clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relieve stress and express their emotions. For example, listening to pop music can lift people's mood during difficult days.

× But to be honest, I don't like seeing because I find myself already as completely unmusical and and it made me frustrated when I when I made when I made, when I sing.

✓ But to be honest, I don't like singing because I find myself completely unmusical and it makes me frustrated when I sing.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; the correct verb form is 'singing' which is the present participle used as a gerund to describe the activity. Also, 'made me frustrated' should be 'makes me frustrated' to match the present tense context. Repetition and extra words were removed for clarity.

× Yeah, when I was young, my mom take me to the singing studios to learn how to sing because she is a big fan of musicals.

✓ Yeah, when I was young, my mom took me to the singing studios to learn how to sing because she is a big fan of musicals.

The verb 'take' should be in the past tense 'took' to agree with the past time reference 'when I was young'. This is a past tense issue.

× But when when my mom is young, she didn't have this condition to learn musical, so she so she want me to learn.

✓ But when my mom was young, she didn't have the opportunity to learn music, so she wanted me to learn.

The phrase 'when my mom is young' should be 'when my mom was young' to match past time. 'Condition' is incorrect here; 'opportunity' is more appropriate. 'Want' should be 'wanted' to match past tense. Also, 'musical' should be 'music' as the subject of learning.

× I just want to sing for myself, especially there, there are no people around me because you know, I'm completely and musical.

✓ I just want to sing for myself, especially when there are no people around me because you know, I'm completely unmusical.

The phrase 'especially there, there are no people' is awkward; 'especially when there are no people' is correct. Also, 'and musical' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'unmusical'. This fixes singular/plural and adjective usage.

× So I didn't want anybody to hear my bad voice.

✓ So I don't want anybody to hear my bad voice.

The sentence context is about a general feeling, so present tense 'don't want' is more appropriate than past tense 'didn't want'. This is a present tense issue.

× Yes, I do think seeing can bring happiness to people like people can use saying by by saying this way they can just relieve their stress and express their emotion like people can listening to pop music, their dates can lift their mood.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can bring happiness to people. People can use singing to relieve their stress and express their emotions. For example, people can listen to pop music and their mood can be lifted.

'Seeing' and 'saying' are incorrect; the correct word is 'singing'. 'People can listening' should be 'people can listen'. The sentence was fragmented and unclear, so it was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.