Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用正确的时态和表达方式。可以用更自然的表达方式说明自己不喜欢唱歌的原因。

例: I don't like singing because I feel shy when I sing. However, I enjoy listening to others sing because their voices are pleasant.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法混乱，表达含糊。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并减少犹豫词。

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was about six or seven years old, but I don't remember it very clearly.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够连贯。建议使用连贯的句子，清楚表达想为父母唱歌的原因。

例: I want to sing for my parents because I feel comfortable with them, especially when I am sick. Singing for them helps me overcome my shyness.

提案: 回答简短且含有多余的语气词，缺乏具体细节。建议增加具体例子或原因，使回答更丰富和自然。

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness. For example, many of my friends enjoy singing because it helps them relax and feel joyful.

× Actually I don't like singing because when I singing 2 don't know why I feel very shy and maybe I think singing is very bad.

✓ Actually I don't like singing because when I sing I don't know why I feel very shy and maybe I think singing is very bad.

这里的动词形式错误，'when I singing' 应该用动词原形 'sing'，因为在 'when' 引导的时间状语从句中，动词应使用一般现在时。

× So I don't like singing but I like to listen and other ones singing.

✓ So I don't like singing but I like to listen to others singing.

这里缺少介词 'to'，正确表达是 'like to listen to'，并且 'other ones singing' 应改为 'others singing'，表示其他人唱歌。

× I learned how to seem very young, maybe when I was seven years old or six years old and I, I, I'm not too very remember to clear.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was very young, maybe when I was seven years old or six years old, but I don't remember very clearly.

原句中 'learned how to seem' 应为 'learned how to sing'，'seem' 是错误的词。'I'm not too very remember to clear' 语法错误，正确表达应为 'I don't remember very clearly'。

× I think I want to sing for my parents because when I when I was sick I was very shy.

✓ I think I want to sing for my parents because when I was sick I was very shy.

句中重复了 'when I'，应删除多余部分。

× So umm but I, I, but I sing to my parents maybe I will not feel shy.

✓ So umm, but I sing to my parents maybe I will not feel shy.

句中多余的重复 'I,' 应删除，保持句子简洁。

× Umm uh, my many friends also like singing and they will feel very happy.

✓ Umm uh, many of my friends also like singing and they feel very happy.

'my many friends' 结构不正确，应该用 'many of my friends' 来表达数量关系。并且 'will feel' 改为一般现在时 'feel' 更符合习惯表达。