Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免语法错误和不连贯的表达。例如，“singing is one of the most important skills for me to you”这句话不通顺，应改为“singing is one of the most important skills for me”。同时，回答应简洁明了，避免冗余。

例: Yes, I like singing very much because I am a music student, and singing is an essential skill for me to learn.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达错误，如“we have a cross which can help us to improve our singing. Activities.”不清楚且不连贯。应使用连贯的句子并正确使用连接词，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I started learning to sing at university. We have weekly singing classes that help us improve our skills.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“read less”不合适，应为“relax more”。同时，句子结构应更清晰，避免重复和不必要的填充词。

例: I want to sing for myself because it makes me very happy and helps me relax. As a music student, singing is an essential skill for me.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，如“make me make the people”不通顺。应简洁表达观点，并使用恰当的连接词使句子连贯。

例: Yes, singing allows me to express my feelings, and I believe songs can help people feel relaxed and happy.

× Actually I am a student in the university and I learn music and singing is one of the most important skills for me to you.

✓ Actually I am a student at the university and I learn music, and singing is one of the most important skills for me.

介词'in'用于表示在某个空间内部，而'at the university'更常用于表示在大学这个机构或环境中。句中'to you'无意义，应删除。

× Once a week we have a cross which can help us to improve our singing. Activities.

✓ Once a week we have a course which can help us to improve our singing activities.

原句中'cross'应为'course'，且'Activities'单独成句不合适，应与前句合并，形成完整句子。

× I think I want to sing for myself because singing can make me very happy and read less.

✓ I think I want to sing for myself because singing can make me very happy and reduce stress.

'read less'无意义，可能想表达'relax'或'reduce stress'，应改为正确表达。

× Umm, I'm a music student and singing is one of my essential ability.

✓ Umm, I'm a music student and singing is one of my essential abilities.

'ability'为可数名词，前面用'one of my'时应使用复数形式'abilities'。

× Singing is a way for me to express my feeling to people, and songs can make me make the people feel relaxed and happy.

✓ Singing is a way for me to express my feelings to people, and songs can make people feel relaxed and happy.

'feeling'应为复数'feelings'，'make me make the people'结构重复且错误，应改为'make people'。