Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然且内容丰富，但部分表达略显重复，如“singing is a very good way for us to express our emotion”和后文的“makes me feel like I'm a superstar”之间缺少更紧密的逻辑连接。建议使用更多连接词使表达更连贯，同时避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I really love singing because it allows me to express my emotions freely. For example, when I go to karaoke with my friends during my leisure time, holding the microphone and singing makes me feel like a superstar performing on stage.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达错误，如“them lessons”和重复词汇“and the and the”，影响表达的清晰度。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达。

例: Actually, I haven't taken any professional singing lessons, but I did attend some classes in primary school where the teacher played the piano. Those classes were quite enjoyable because I could sing along with my classmates.

提案: 回答表达了个人观点，但存在重复词汇“you'll you'll”，且口语化缩写“'cause”不够正式。建议避免重复，使用更正式的表达，并适当丰富理由。

例: I haven't really thought about this before, but I prefer singing for myself rather than in front of others because performing publicly can be stressful and I might be afraid of making mistakes.

提案: 回答内容积极且有个人例子，但存在语法错误，如“a effective”应为“an effective”，且部分表达略显简单。建议注意冠词使用，丰富词汇，并使表达更自然流畅。

例: Definitely, singing brings happiness to people because it is an effective way to express emotions and relax. For instance, when I face difficult times, I often listen to sad music to help me feel better.

× Singing is a very good way for us to express our emotion and I enjoy going to karaoke with my friends during my leisure time.

✓ Singing is a very good way for us to express our emotions and I enjoy going to karaoke with my friends during my leisure time.

emotion 应为复数 emotions，因为这里指的是多种情感的表达。

× Actually, I didn't go to any professional lessons, but I have attended some lessons in my primary school.

✓ Actually, I didn't go to any professional lesson, but I have attended some lessons in my primary school.

professional lessons 应为 professional lesson，因为这里指的是没有参加任何一节专业课程，lesson 用单数更合适。

× We had them lessons with my classmates and the and the teacher played piano.

✓ We had those lessons with my classmates and the teacher played the piano.

句子结构混乱，'them lessons' 应改为 'those lessons'，并且重复的 'and the' 应删除，'played piano' 前应加定冠词 the。

× The the class is quite enjoyable.

✓ The class is quite enjoyable.

重复使用了定冠词 'The'，应删除多余的一个。

× Compared to singing in front of others, I prefer to sing for myself 'cause when you're singing in front of other people you'll you'll feel stressful and afraid to make any mistakes.

✓ Compared to singing in front of others, I prefer to sing for myself because when you're singing in front of other people you'll feel stressed and afraid to make any mistakes.

'stressful' 是形容词，表示令人感到压力的，应该用过去分词 'stressed' 来表示人的感受。'cause' 是口语缩写，正式场合应使用 'because'。

× It is a effective way for us to express our emotion and get relaxed.

✓ It is an effective way for us to express our emotions and get relaxed.

'a' 应改为 'an' 因为 effective 以元音音素开头；emotion 应为复数 emotions。