Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp. Hãy cố gắng trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu chủ đề và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, đồng thời giới hạn câu trả lời trong 5 câu.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax after a stressful day. When I sing, I feel immersed in the music, which lifts my mood and makes me happy.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và giải thích thêm một chút về cảm nhận của bạn để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: No, I have never learned how to sing properly, and I regret it because I wish I could improve my voice.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tự nhiên hơn.

例: I want to sing for my family because I love them deeply. Singing for my parents and younger sister would be a way to show my affection and appreciation.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their emotions. For example, singing songs with meaningful lyrics can help us share love and gratitude with others.

× I think singing helps me relaxation after the bad days

✓ I think singing helps me relax after bad days

The verb 'helps' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'relax' instead of the noun 'relaxation'. Using 'relax' correctly shows the action that singing helps with.

× I would I will be sunk in the feeling when I when I singing because it's so good and it's make me.

✓ I would be sunk in the feeling when I am singing because it's so good and it makes me feel that way.

The sentence has mixed modal verbs and incorrect verb forms. 'Would' and 'will' are redundant together; 'would be sunk' is correct for conditional or hypothetical situations. Also, 'when I singing' should be 'when I am singing' to use the present continuous tense. 'It's make me' should be 'it makes me' to agree with the singular subject.

× I don't have a good singing voice and I not ever, I'm not ever learned how to sing this, which is my enormous regret in my life.

✓ I don't have a good singing voice and I have never learned how to sing, which is my enormous regret in my life.

The phrase 'I'm not ever learned' is incorrect; the present perfect tense 'have never learned' is appropriate here to express an experience up to now. Also, 'not ever' is better expressed as 'never'.

× I want to sing for my family because I love family so much and I love my parents, my younger sister.

✓ I want to sing for my family because I love my family so much, including my parents and my younger sister.

The sentence lacks the possessive pronoun 'my' before 'family' in the first clause, which is necessary to specify whose family is being referred to. Adding 'including' clarifies the members of the family.

× I want to sing for them and another another ways, another thing that I want to.

✓ I want to sing for them and also for other reasons.

The original sentence is incomplete and repetitive ('another another ways'). It needs to be restructured to clearly express the intended meaning.

× I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing makes makes everyone feel happy and helps everyone express our love and gratitude.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing makes everyone feel happy and helps everyone express their love and gratitude.

The pronoun 'our' is inconsistent with 'everyone'. 'Everyone' is singular and requires singular pronouns like 'his or her' or the plural 'their' for inclusivity. Using 'their' is common and acceptable here.

× We can through the lyrics to show and describe our love.

✓ We can use the lyrics to show and describe our love.

The preposition 'through' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb is 'use' to indicate employing the lyrics as a medium to express love.