Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is my favourite hobby. For example, on my birthday, I usually sing songs in front of my family and friends, who often compliment my voice, which makes me feel happy.

提案: Answer directly and clearly, then provide specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, I have learned by listening to music on TV while doing my daily chores, which helped me improve my singing skills gradually.

提案: Make your answer more natural by starting with a clear topic sentence and then adding specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammatical errors and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: I love to sing for my husband because he is very kind and enjoys listening to me. Moreover, he often invites me to sing and dance with him, which makes our time together enjoyable.

提案: Provide a clear and concise answer first, then support it with specific examples using linking words. Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow for better coherence.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. For instance, when someone feels sad, listening to music and singing along can help them forget their worries and feel better, including myself.

× I like because singing is my hobby.

✓ I like it because singing is my hobby.

The sentence is missing the pronoun 'it' after 'like' to make the sentence grammatically correct. 'Like' as a verb needs an object, so 'I like it because...' is correct.

× I sing a song in front of my siblings and family members as well as my friends and they also praising me and also praising my voice.

✓ I sing a song in front of my siblings, family members, and friends, and they also praise me and my voice.

The verb 'praising' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'praise' to agree with the plural subject 'they'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by removing redundancy and adding commas for clarity.

× No, I did not learn from any singer.

✓ No, I have not learned from any singer.

Since the question is about experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have not learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'did not learn'.

× But I listen music on TV when I was doing my daily chores.

✓ But I listen to music on TV when I am doing my daily chores.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, the tense should be present continuous 'am doing' to match the habitual action.

× So doing this kind of steps I I listen and learn from there.

✓ So by doing these kinds of steps, I listen and learn from there.

The sentence has repetition ('I I') and awkward phrasing. 'By doing these kinds of steps' is a clearer expression, and removing repeated words improves clarity.

× But I did not take any kind of class to learn singing.

✓ But I have not taken any kind of class to learn singing.

Present perfect tense 'have not taken' is more appropriate to indicate experience up to now rather than simple past 'did not take'.

× He also like to me to dance and sing with him.

✓ He also likes me to dance and sing with him.

The verb 'like' should be in third person singular form 'likes' to agree with the subject 'He'. Also, the phrase 'like to me' is incorrect; it should be 'likes me to'.

× Sometime, yes, some people when they are sad and they listen some kind of music and sing with the song, they they forget their problems and tensions for up to some extent.

✓ Sometimes, yes, some people when they are sad and listen to some kind of music and sing along with the song, they forget their problems and tensions to some extent.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Listen some kind of music' requires the preposition 'to'. 'Sing with the song' is better expressed as 'sing along with the song'. Also, 'for up to some extent' is corrected to 'to some extent'.

× So I think singing can bring happiness for the peoples, for the people and for me also.

✓ So I think singing can bring happiness to people and to me also.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the correct plural noun. Also, the preposition 'for' should be 'to' when expressing the recipient of happiness.