Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I usually thinking' nên sửa thành 'I usually think'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tránh lặp lại ý giống nhau. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. I usually sing during special occasions like birthdays and gatherings, which helps me connect with my loved ones.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều từ thừa như 'uh'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh nói lặp và hoàn chỉnh câu. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons because I haven't had enough time. However, I can sing quite well, and my friends often compliment my voice.

提案: Câu trả lời chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp như thiếu mạo từ và chia động từ. Bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ ý, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn.

例: I would love to sing for people I care about, such as my parents and close friends. Singing at birthdays is a great way to strengthen our bond and share happiness.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời khá tốt nhưng có thể tránh lặp từ như 'well' và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn như 'gloomy moment' thay vì 'doom moment'. Hãy sử dụng câu nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. I believe singing is a universal language that can transform a gloomy moment into something uplifting. Many people also use singing as a form of therapy to improve their mood.

× And I usually thinking on several special occasions like birthdays and gathering, I think it is a good way to connect with loved ones.

✓ And I usually think on several special occasions like birthdays and gatherings, I think it is a good way to connect with loved ones.

The verb 'thinking' is incorrectly used here; after 'usually' the base form 'think' should be used instead of the '-ing' form. Also, 'gathering' should be plural 'gatherings' to match the plural 'occasions'.

× And I usually thinking on several special occasions like birthdays and gathering, I think it is a good way to connect with loved ones.

✓ And I usually think about several special occasions like birthdays and gatherings, I think it is a good way to connect with loved ones.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect after 'think' in this context; the correct preposition is 'about'.

× No, I would say that, well, I didn't have enough time to, uh, follow a formal lesson and to be honest, uh, I do not really think that my voice that bad.

✓ No, I would say that, well, I didn't have enough time to, uh, follow a formal lesson and to be honest, uh, I do not really think that my voice is that bad.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' in the clause 'my voice that bad'. The correct form is 'my voice is that bad' to complete the sentence properly in present tense.

× I can sing into most of the time and my friends say that I.

✓ I can sing most of the time and my friends say that I can.

The phrase 'sing into most of the time' is incorrect; it should be 'sing most of the time'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; 'my friends say that I' needs a verb to complete the thought, such as 'can'.

× Well I would love to sing for people I care like my parents or my close friend it is a good way to connect with loved ones and bond our connection well and I usually sing at the birthdays as a way to.

✓ Well, I would love to sing for people I care about like my parents or my close friends. It is a good way to connect with loved ones and strengthen our bond. I usually sing at birthdays as a way to do that.

The phrase 'people I care' is incomplete; it should be 'people I care about'. 'Close friend' should be plural 'close friends' to match 'people'. The sentence is run-on and lacks proper punctuation and structure. Also, 'bond our connection well' is awkward; 'strengthen our bond' is better. The last part is incomplete and needs completion.

× Well, and many people use singing as a therapy session.

✓ Well, many people use singing as a therapy session.

The conjunction 'and' after 'Well,' is unnecessary and incorrect here; removing it improves sentence flow.